What I Could Never Tell My Mother This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

February 1, 2008
What I could never tell my mother
Isn’t her fault; it’s mine
It’s things wrapped inside of me, coiled like wire with the filament exposed
She could accept them – those things – I’m sure
Maybe even love them the way she loves me; little puzzle pieces
That fell out of the box when we were putting it under the sofa
After we almost finished the puzzle together
But I hide them inside my deepest aorta
Keeping them safe because who wants to grab a still-beating heart?
It would kill me to take those secrets out
So my mother may know they exist
But she lets me keep them.
And maybe that’s the real secret, the one that
She doesn’t know –
It’s that I need some secrets of my own.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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KrystalT said...
Nov. 21, 2010 at 2:13 pm
I wish I had a relationship like that with my mom. Or any at all really. (I haven't seen her in over a year) Keep writing.
WritingJuliaThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 17, 2010 at 6:56 pm
This is great!
Ducttape.holds.my.heart.toghter said...
Oct. 22, 2010 at 6:30 pm
This is so good I love it.....your way way better then you you dont need help!
CherokeeDoggette replied...
Nov. 5, 2010 at 1:30 pm

i love this poem and i can really relate because i have secrets of my own that i could never reveal to my mother


CammyLashay said...
Oct. 17, 2010 at 3:20 pm
i enjoyed this poem couldnt understand where it was leading but i caught on
Dessometrics said...
Oct. 17, 2010 at 1:52 pm
i love this its abosolutely amazing and really paints a picture of the relationship
SaMiLoVe97 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 24, 2010 at 9:33 am

Beautiful work. Keep writing:)

                                            <3 Sami

Cupcakealia said...
Sept. 8, 2010 at 9:46 am

this is such a lovely piece!!!


summer rose123 replied...
Oct. 14, 2010 at 9:48 pm
its really pretty and graceful
Phantom_Girl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 3, 2010 at 10:49 am
Incredibly well written with a beautiful, relatable theme. The ending was perfect, it kind of left you wondering, but not too much. You are a great writer.
xXDeadxSoulXx said...
Aug. 25, 2010 at 11:28 am

This is REALLY good and I love it....I can totally relate to this in some ways and kinda cant in others......So yea uhm great job haha......


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Ramonda S said...
Aug. 14, 2010 at 5:01 pm
I really enjoyed reading this! I love this
Lizz17 said...
Aug. 12, 2010 at 8:29 pm
I have to say that this is amazing but, what's it about? at first i thought it was about a pregnant teenager but then i looked up the word aorta and it was part of the heart. is it about drugs or something? Either way, it's still good.
brown.sugar said...
Aug. 10, 2010 at 6:59 pm
good poem. can you check out mine
krissi.love7 said...
Aug. 4, 2010 at 7:07 pm
wow... perfect timing :) this is really good. i like it a lot.
Delilah_Delusion said...
Jul. 25, 2010 at 5:42 am

I love that you found a way to use 'aorta' in poetry ^^

It's beautiful. good work. 

Aylleen K. said...
Jul. 24, 2010 at 1:52 pm
i love this!!!!!! its deep . :]]] look at my poems if u can ;)
Samantha D. said...
Jul. 22, 2010 at 6:49 pm
this is absolutely GREAT!!! Excellent job!
CarolynQ said...
Jul. 21, 2010 at 10:03 pm
Gosh, I like this,  I like the way you described the secrets as puzzle pieces and I can definately relate to this piece. Good job I enjoyed it, please look at my poetry  if you have time. :)
MaKayla1513 said...
Jul. 21, 2010 at 12:39 pm

this is amazing! I can really realte to it, because thats how some of my family members are. Keep it up!

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