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What I Could Never Tell My Mother MAG

February 1, 2008
By Anonymous

What I could never tell my mother
Isn’t her fault; it’s mine
It’s things wrapped inside of me, coiled like wire with the filament exposed
She could accept them – those things – I’m sure
Maybe even love them the way she loves me; little puzzle pieces
That fell out of the box when we were putting it under the sofa
After we almost finished the puzzle together
But I hide them inside my deepest aorta
Keeping them safe because who wants to grab a still-beating heart?
It would kill me to take those secrets out
So my mother may know they exist
But she lets me keep them.
And maybe that’s the real secret, the one that
Shhhh
She doesn’t know –
It’s that I need some secrets of my own.



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on Nov. 29 2010 at 1:16 am
RedpillBluepill, East Brunswick, New Jersey
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the "aorta" really ruined this for me. It's such a clunky word, and it's not even used right in this write. Also, the semicolon should be a regular colon. But other than that, this poem's really good.

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on Nov. 21 2010 at 2:13 pm
LunaLives GOLD, South Bend, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Because I can!-Me "Life is a choice and death is a decision"-Lil Wayne

I wish I had a relationship like that with my mom. Or any at all really. (I haven't seen her in over a year) Keep writing.

on Nov. 17 2010 at 6:56 pm
WritingJulia SILVER, Binghamton, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Kind words can be short and easy to say, but their echoes are truly endless." -Mother Theresa

This is great!

on Nov. 5 2010 at 1:30 pm
BeautifulSkye PLATINUM, Mansfield, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
you cant live with them... you cant live without them.

i love this poem and i can really relate because i have secrets of my own that i could never reveal to my mother

 


on Oct. 22 2010 at 6:30 pm
Ducttape.isnt.tear.proof GOLD, Eureka, California
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm selfish, impatient and a little insecure. I make mistakes, I am out of control and at times hard to handle. But if you can't handle me at my worst, then you sure as hell don't deserve me at my best."
— Marilyn Monroe
"A wise girl kisses but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, and leaves before she is left."
— Marilyn Monroe
"I am good, but not an angel. I do sin, but I am not the devil. I am just a small girl in a big world trying to find someone to love."
— Marilyn Monroe
"Who said nights were for sleep?"
— Marilyn Monroe
"Sex is part of nature. I go along with nature."
— Marilyn Monroe

This is so good I love it.....your way way better then you you dont need help!

on Oct. 17 2010 at 3:20 pm
CammyLashay SILVER, Java, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Failure is not for me.

i enjoyed this poem couldnt understand where it was leading but i caught on

on Oct. 17 2010 at 1:52 pm
Dessometrics BRONZE, Charleston, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
currently seeking

i love this its abosolutely amazing and really paints a picture of the relationship

on Oct. 14 2010 at 9:48 pm
its really pretty and graceful

on Sep. 24 2010 at 9:33 am
SaMiLoVe97 SILVER, Okawville, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
If it doesnt break your heart it isnt love, if it doesnt break your heart its not enough. Its when youre breaking down with your insides coming out.Thats when you learn what youre made of.-Switchfoot<3

Beautiful work. Keep writing:)

                                            <3 Sami


on Sep. 8 2010 at 9:46 am
Cupcakealia BRONZE, Islamabad, Other
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Favorite Quote:
that is creepy on so many levels!!

this is such a lovely piece!!!

 


on Sep. 3 2010 at 10:49 am
Phantom_Girl GOLD, Ft. Carson, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"If it comes out of the lion's mouth...it will be on the test."
-Mr. Bala

Incredibly well written with a beautiful, relatable theme. The ending was perfect, it kind of left you wondering, but not too much. You are a great writer.

on Aug. 25 2010 at 11:28 am
SuicidalDreamer.. PLATINUM, Marshall, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Drop The World....." Or "Everything Happens For A Reason....." Or "I am jealous of every woman that has ever hugged him, Cause for that mere second. They held my entire world."

This is REALLY good and I love it....I can totally relate to this in some ways and kinda cant in others......So yea uhm great job haha......

 

(P.S. Check out some of my poems if you have the time...Thankies :]] )


on Aug. 14 2010 at 5:01 pm
Ramonda S BRONZE, Kansas City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
Tough times don't last,
Tough people do.

I really enjoyed reading this! I love this

on Aug. 12 2010 at 8:29 pm
The_Squirrel GOLD, Port Alberni, Other
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Favorite Quote:
I will because I can, I can because I want to, I want to becasue you said I couldn't.

I have to say that this is amazing but, what's it about? at first i thought it was about a pregnant teenager but then i looked up the word aorta and it was part of the heart. is it about drugs or something? Either way, it's still good.

on Aug. 10 2010 at 6:59 pm
brown.sugar BRONZE, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
i lovin it

good poem. can you check out mine

on Aug. 4 2010 at 7:07 pm
createakristen SILVER, Corpus Christi, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"There isn't a person on this planet who should let a past nightmare dictate or cloud their future dreams." -CM Punk

wow... perfect timing :) this is really good. i like it a lot.

on Jul. 25 2010 at 5:42 am
Delilah_Delusion SILVER, Corpus Christi, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
You're not sick you're just in love.
-Irving Berlin

I love that you found a way to use 'aorta' in poetry ^^

It's beautiful. good work. 


blackstarsx3 said...
on Jul. 24 2010 at 1:52 pm
blackstarsx3, Bronx, New York
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i love this!!!!!! its deep . :]]] look at my poems if u can ;)

SAM.D BRONZE said...
on Jul. 22 2010 at 6:49 pm
SAM.D BRONZE, Cleveland, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"it's all good" =)

this is absolutely GREAT!!! Excellent job!

CarolynQ GOLD said...
on Jul. 21 2010 at 10:03 pm
CarolynQ GOLD, Manalapan, New Jersey
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Gosh, I like this,  I like the way you described the secrets as puzzle pieces and I can definately relate to this piece. Good job I enjoyed it, please look at my poetry  if you have time. :)