no one told me how hard it would be

Seeing everyone with their loved ones
making me feel left out
tears rushing down my face like rain rushing down the window
I just wanna run from my fears and problems
Trying to erase all the memories from what I once had
needing friends more then ever
trying to find a soul mate to help me feel better
Always having a close friend near is a good idea
But now the friend is gone so I feel empty
running into my ex brings back the good memories
trying to find things to get my mind off the break up but some things make it worse
First year we were officially dating
people questioned us and tried to make us a better couple then we were





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VerySimplyTrace This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 14, 2013 at 10:53 pm
There's definitely a prominent overtone established here, and I like the simplicity of the imagery and verses, but I think you could have structured this in such a way that could have driven the emotion home more. That's not to say it isn't a good piece, because it is, I enjoyed reading it. I just feel like there's some untold story waiting to be unraveled deep within this, and that it can be elaborated on. But what do I know, right? :P
 
waterbendercarorain replied...
Jun. 14, 2013 at 10:54 pm
thanks so much for the feedback its going to really help me more with my writing in the future
 
TheHangingGirl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 28, 2012 at 1:33 pm
I Like it :) Maybe try some Line breaks in it ;)
 
waterbendercarorain replied...
Jul. 28, 2012 at 1:36 pm
thanks for the fedback :) and im glad u like it
 
Lovergirl said...
May 7, 2012 at 1:50 pm

i agree you can feel the emotions in the word that are written

 

 
rainbowmermaid replied...
May 7, 2012 at 1:57 pm
thanks that means a lot 2 me my ex broke up with me over fb so i had to write out how i felt
 
Lovergirl replied...
May 14, 2012 at 4:47 pm
your should check our some of my work i think you'll likee some of it
 
hiddeninvisiblegirl replied...
May 14, 2012 at 5:57 pm
i shall do that
 
Acastillo said...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 2:22 pm
I really understand you on the being lonely part, I have yet too to find that perfect someone. I really felt your emotion through the poem, great job:)
 
DestinyDefyingGravity7 said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 10:18 pm
This has so much emotion. It is really well done. I hope you find that soul mate.
 
rainbowbutterfly replied...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 11:23 pm
thanks that means a whole lot to me and thanks i hope i will 2
 
shy2012 said...
Jan. 29, 2012 at 1:51 pm
nice i love it ;)
 
White_Trash843 said...
Jan. 27, 2012 at 4:48 pm
This is a nice deep poem! KEEP WRITING!
 
rainbowbutterfly replied...
Jan. 27, 2012 at 4:56 pm
thanks that means a lot to me :)
 
SeizeTheDay said...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 7:01 pm
Really deep - tugging at my heart strings. Very well written!
 
rainbowbutterfly replied...
Jan. 7, 2012 at 7:31 pm
thanks that means a lot to me
 
rainbowbutterfly said...
Dec. 31, 2011 at 6:24 pm
thanks and ik but it descripes how i feel
 
lely-hdz said...
Dec. 31, 2011 at 4:45 pm
its sad rain. but i really like it!
 
Wonderment said...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 2:26 pm
I love the imgry. This is good stuff.
 
rainbowbutterfly replied...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 2:28 pm
thanks i worked hard on it
 
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