no one told me how hard it would be

November 30, 2011
By carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 249 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind


Seeing everyone with their loved ones
making me feel left out
tears rushing down my face like rain rushing down the window
I just wanna run from my fears and problems
Trying to erase all the memories from what I once had
needing friends more then ever
trying to find a soul mate to help me feel better
Always having a close friend near is a good idea
But now the friend is gone so I feel empty
running into my ex brings back the good memories
trying to find things to get my mind off the break up but some things make it worse
First year we were officially dating
people questioned us and tried to make us a better couple then we were


The author's comments:
i was working in hw hour at my school thinking about my ex bf and me. working on this made me sad when my friends and teachers read it they told me it almost made them cry

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on Jun. 14 2013 at 10:54 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 249 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

thanks so much for the feedback its going to really help me more with my writing in the future

on Jun. 14 2013 at 10:53 pm
Trace.C.Schuelke PLATINUM, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Secrets are secrets for a reason, and some do not wish to see them uncovered. Especially when the secrets are particularly unseemly..."

There's definitely a prominent overtone established here, and I like the simplicity of the imagery and verses, but I think you could have structured this in such a way that could have driven the emotion home more. That's not to say it isn't a good piece, because it is, I enjoyed reading it. I just feel like there's some untold story waiting to be unraveled deep within this, and that it can be elaborated on. But what do I know, right? :P

on Jul. 28 2012 at 1:36 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 249 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

thanks for the fedback :) and im glad u like it

on Jul. 28 2012 at 1:33 pm
TheHangingGirl BRONZE, Winter Haven, Florida
1 article 1 photo 250 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Poets utter great and wise things that they themselves can not comprehend."

I Like it :) Maybe try some Line breaks in it ;)

on May. 14 2012 at 5:57 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 249 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

i shall do that

Lovergirl GOLD said...
on May. 14 2012 at 4:47 pm
Lovergirl GOLD, Gretna, Virginia
12 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"don't jugde and ye won't be jugde" matthew 7:1
"If you don't know the trees you will get lost in the forest, but if you don't know the stories you will get lost in life' -Siderian Proverb

your should check our some of my work i think you'll likee some of it

on May. 7 2012 at 1:57 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 249 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

thanks that means a lot 2 me my ex broke up with me over fb so i had to write out how i felt

Lovergirl GOLD said...
on May. 7 2012 at 1:50 pm
Lovergirl GOLD, Gretna, Virginia
12 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"don't jugde and ye won't be jugde" matthew 7:1
"If you don't know the trees you will get lost in the forest, but if you don't know the stories you will get lost in life' -Siderian Proverb

i agree you can feel the emotions in the word that are written

 


Acastillo GOLD said...
on Feb. 20 2012 at 2:22 pm
Acastillo GOLD, Phoenix, Arizona
11 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
Just because you have flaws, doesn't mean you aren't beautiful ~Zayn Malik

I really understand you on the being lonely part, I have yet too to find that perfect someone. I really felt your emotion through the poem, great job:)

on Feb. 4 2012 at 11:23 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 249 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

thanks that means a whole lot to me and thanks i hope i will 2

on Feb. 4 2012 at 10:18 pm
Sofia_Sorabella SILVER, Pocatello, Idaho
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Favorite Quote:
A word is a bud attempting to become a twig. How can one not dream while writing? It is the pen which dreams. The blank page gives the right to dream.
- Gaston Bachelard

This has so much emotion. It is really well done. I hope you find that soul mate.

on Jan. 29 2012 at 1:51 pm
Simplyjessey BRONZE, Dillonvale, Ohio
4 articles 0 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be yourself everyone else is taken.

nice i love it ;)

on Jan. 27 2012 at 4:56 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 249 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

thanks that means a lot to me :)

Phoenix. said...
on Jan. 27 2012 at 4:48 pm
Phoenix., Pittsfield, Pennsylvania
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This is a nice deep poem! KEEP WRITING!

on Jan. 7 2012 at 7:31 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 249 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

thanks that means a lot to me

on Jan. 7 2012 at 7:01 pm
SeizeTheDay SILVER, Cleveland Heights, Ohio
7 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
Carpe Diem (Seize the day).

Really deep - tugging at my heart strings. Very well written!

on Dec. 31 2011 at 6:24 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 249 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

thanks and ik but it descripes how i feel

on Dec. 31 2011 at 4:45 pm
yazigirl BRONZE, Athens, Texas
1 article 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"people say hell is endless. i say hell is empty and all the demons are here"- one tree hill

its sad rain. but i really like it!

on Dec. 23 2011 at 2:28 pm
carothesparrow GOLD, Lilburn, Georgia
15 articles 9 photos 249 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont give up she will talk someday my friend made this quote she is really cool cause she understands about my sister
it starts with ONE to make a differerence!!! i learned this quote at a leadership camp

ohana means family no one gets left behind

thanks i worked hard on it

on Dec. 23 2011 at 2:26 pm
Wonderment DIAMOND, Scranton, Pennsylvania
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I love the imgry. This is good stuff.




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