Waiting

December 6, 2011
By PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)


A feeling, like airports
and early morning rain,
and other in-between things,
you know, those things that aren't really there,
they're just in-between,
like the New England coast
to my friends in Germany.
Thats what it feels like, here,
waiting for you.


The author's comments:
Empty school hallways, the space between us and the clouds, sad, sad doorways. That sort of thing.

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on Aug. 22 2012 at 1:32 am
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

Hm. Thank you. That is a very good point- as it really only needs to be said once. I appreciate your feedback, and it's so good to know you liked it!

on Aug. 18 2012 at 7:50 pm
Mashley310 BRONZE, Rowlett, Texas
2 articles 1 photo 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"They always forget the last part of that saying: curiosity killed the cat but satisfaction brought it back" its something to that effect anyway." - Tamora Pierce

I liked it! You got your point across very well, which is hard to do in a short poem (for me anyway).  I liked the way you compared your feelings to situations, to make it more vivid and real. The only thing I didn't like was the reptition of "in-between", it seemed kind of redundant. Other than that, good job!




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