Can You Whisper me a Lie

November 27, 2011
By applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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Can you whisper me a lie?
Come a little closer, brush my hair back
Whisper good things
My hope survives in only lies
For what truth we have is a crumbling world
People falling prey to greed
Good memories are long forgotten
and the bad are always lingering
A turn of events, a loss indeed
People lost in mixed emotions
And when were heroes forgotten?
And the monsters we let plague our minds
A border between the perfect and the misfits,
sets no rules to real justice
And the only story left to tell,
is our mistakes, our fails, our wanted dreams
No trust is simple; it’s no escape
A lie will set these chains on fire
and my heart will begin to beat
Our fatal world,
a truth I bear
but,
Say you love me
Make me see that we’re forever
Whisper me at least that lie



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on Mar. 11 2012 at 10:33 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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oh wow. that is one amazing comment. I'm verry flattered:)thankyou so much. it means alot!

on Mar. 11 2012 at 7:37 pm
wordjunkie BRONZE, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Those who say it can't be done should not interrupt those who are doing it.

My god. This was...really good. I love the way you seperate the sentences. breathless.

on Feb. 24 2012 at 6:30 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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Only a couple years. though people teeninl and the people in my life helped me reach far. Now I just need to work on my verb tenses in my other writings:)thankyou!!!

on Feb. 7 2012 at 3:58 pm
Chelsi-Law BRONZE, Baker, Montana
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Favorite Quote:
"Dont cry because it's over. Smile because it happened."














-Dr. Seuss

This is realy good. How long have you been into writing?

on Jan. 3 2012 at 5:06 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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heh :)u remind me of a few of my friends, they use the word legit:)thankyou for ur comment!it means so much to me! and what u said!!!!oy!!!:)i am very greatful and even embarased!it was a very nice things ya said

on Jan. 3 2012 at 5:03 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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because first, i write for myself:)just also hope u can enjoy too

on Jan. 3 2012 at 5:02 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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aweXD!!!i feel soooo greatful. i hope i can continue to make work people can enjoy at the same time

on Dec. 29 2011 at 7:43 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

This poem is legit. You write poetry very very well. I expect to see your work published in the magazine soon. Keep it up! *****

on Dec. 25 2011 at 3:28 pm
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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I really enjoy the concept of this piece. My only suggestion is maybe seperate your lines into stanzas so it's more eye appleaing. Otherwise, this is great!

on Dec. 9 2011 at 8:17 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

I love this, apple! You are an amazing writer.  I loved the last three lines. It is a little cynical I admit, but sometimes I feel that way when I think about love.

on Dec. 8 2011 at 10:15 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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o o

 ^    thats an amzing compliment!


on Dec. 8 2011 at 10:10 pm
Kingdom_of_the_Forgotten GOLD, Ogden, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Time, the cradle of hope.... Wisdom walks before it, opportunity with it, and repentance behind it: he that has made it his friend will have little to fear from his enemies, but he that has made it his enemy will have little to hope from his friends." ~Charles Caleb Colton

Yeah. I definitely think it's good. I can feel some emotion and it flows nicely. In my opinion it's better then most of the high rated poems.

on Dec. 8 2011 at 10:08 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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0_o?would that mean its kinda good?if so, i think its because not everyone would agree. But im glad you think its good.

on Dec. 8 2011 at 10:06 pm
applesauceHater SILVER, Nikolaevsk, Alaska
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oy:)i have another poem that perty much critisizes the world again, its pending. but i dont mean to sound dark! this poem just came to me and those words in the middle needed to be there:)

on Dec. 8 2011 at 9:02 pm
Kingdom_of_the_Forgotten GOLD, Ogden, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Time, the cradle of hope.... Wisdom walks before it, opportunity with it, and repentance behind it: he that has made it his friend will have little to fear from his enemies, but he that has made it his enemy will have little to hope from his friends." ~Charles Caleb Colton

This is really good. I'm wondering why it hasn't shown up on the home page of the website yet.

on Dec. 8 2011 at 4:13 pm
HoldingFast GOLD, Plano, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If I wasn't meant to fly, I wouldn't have these wings"

That's really good. i love the middle that pretty much critizes the world. its pretty legit. Very well written. I have no critiziem.




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