Endless Fight

November 22, 2011
By xXxXangelXxXx SILVER, Henderson, Texas
xXxXangelXxXx SILVER, Henderson, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Accept no one's definition of your life; define yourself"
" Love and Loyalty Runs Deeper Than Blood!"
"A wise girl kisses, but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, leaves b4 shes left."


As I lay 6 feet deep,
I wait for the world to see me.
I've been dead for way to long,
I long for life and love.

They've laid a single rose
of black on my grave.
Never asking me back,
Wishing me to just stay that way.

I need a hero,
I need a knight.
To come and save me
from endless fight.

All I see is dark fury,
All I see is the rage.
Feel like I'm in front of the jury,
Or being booed off stage.

They say I'm not important,
that I don't matter.
However, I know differently.
Does anyone else?

I need a savior,
I need a redeemer
to save me
from my endless fight.


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on Oct. 30 2013 at 1:08 pm
xXxXangelXxXx SILVER, Henderson, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Accept no one's definition of your life; define yourself"
" Love and Loyalty Runs Deeper Than Blood!"
"A wise girl kisses, but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, leaves b4 shes left."

thank u so much!  and everyone has their own meaning :)

on Aug. 29 2013 at 7:51 am
DawnieRae BRONZE, Lancaster, Ohio
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This poem is really good! I like it, even though im not quite sure what it means....i'll read it again, then maybe i'll understand. Anyways, really great!! 

on Mar. 13 2013 at 9:37 am
xXxXangelXxXx SILVER, Henderson, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Accept no one's definition of your life; define yourself"
" Love and Loyalty Runs Deeper Than Blood!"
"A wise girl kisses, but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, leaves b4 shes left."

thank you so very much :)

on Dec. 29 2012 at 7:27 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Now THIS is good. I love it! I especially like using the idea of being dead and gone to parallel feeling unimportant and invisible. I like how it alternates between rhyming and non rhyming stanzas. Great work!

on May. 3 2012 at 2:11 pm
xXxXangelXxXx SILVER, Henderson, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Accept no one's definition of your life; define yourself"
" Love and Loyalty Runs Deeper Than Blood!"
"A wise girl kisses, but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, leaves b4 shes left."

thx i will. though u cm click on my name and have it where the editor emails u when ever i post something new....

but i will definitly tell u

meanangel


on May. 1 2012 at 11:24 pm
readingmusic BRONZE, Arp, Texas
2 articles 4 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"That which we call a rose by any other name would smell as sweet..." -William Shakespeare "Romeo and Juliet"

So if you come out with your own book please let me know because I will definitely read it...you are such an inspiring writer...so many people these days lack some of the amazing qualities you put in your poetry

on Mar. 9 2012 at 2:44 pm
A.Raven.Is.Like.A.Writing.Desk PLATINUM, Caledonia, Mississippi
32 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
If zombies attack us..im tripping u
If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will go through life thinking its stupid.
If you love somthing then let it go, if it doesn't come back it was never yours.
I'm scared to fall and be dropped.

The way you lay it out is perfect, and the way you use complicated meanings in a simple way (maybe without meaning to do so or not) is just mind blowing. You need no help in my opinion. Just keep doing what you're doing and you will be remembered.

on Feb. 20 2012 at 6:02 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
56 articles 0 photos 253 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

I know you told me I didn't need to review anything of yours, but my curiosity was aroused. And I must say, this was even better than I had anticipated it would be. You've done this interesting thing by giving life to a dead body. It really makes the reader think. I especially like the description of the grave--highlighting just how quickly people can move on. You have a lot of skill, so keep writing! :)

on Dec. 29 2011 at 7:51 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

This flowed really well and it almost sounds like a song to me. Good job! *****

on Dec. 14 2011 at 2:29 pm
xXxXangelXxXx SILVER, Henderson, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Accept no one's definition of your life; define yourself"
" Love and Loyalty Runs Deeper Than Blood!"
"A wise girl kisses, but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, leaves b4 shes left."

thx... Do u have anything that u need me to check out?

 


on Dec. 14 2011 at 1:32 pm
Goddess PLATINUM, Connellsville, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
“Dream as if you'll live forever, live as if you'll die today.”

wow! that was really good.

on Dec. 9 2011 at 5:28 pm
RaveFire PLATINUM, Vancouver, Washington
32 articles 1 photo 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes You Have To Give Up Your Life To Save It." ~some book that i don't remember the name of

"Live Life Like There's No Yesterday" ~ random billboard

"If No One Can Hurt You, Then Nobody Loves You" ` ~ Kerli?

if u could comment on "the girl i see" that would be awesome. thx so much :)

goodangle said...
on Dec. 9 2011 at 3:13 pm
goodangle, Price, Texas
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great work sounds good not that i dided alrady told you that,lol

on Dec. 9 2011 at 3:07 pm
xXxXangelXxXx SILVER, Henderson, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Accept no one's definition of your life; define yourself"
" Love and Loyalty Runs Deeper Than Blood!"
"A wise girl kisses, but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, leaves b4 shes left."

Thx. Is there something you want me to givebackon?

on Dec. 7 2011 at 3:27 pm
RaveFire PLATINUM, Vancouver, Washington
32 articles 1 photo 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes You Have To Give Up Your Life To Save It." ~some book that i don't remember the name of

"Live Life Like There's No Yesterday" ~ random billboard

"If No One Can Hurt You, Then Nobody Loves You" ` ~ Kerli?

like dreamer, the first 2 and the last 2 were also my favorites stanzas. very good :) i like the poem.

on Nov. 30 2011 at 9:48 am
xXxXangelXxXx SILVER, Henderson, Texas
9 articles 0 photos 78 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Accept no one's definition of your life; define yourself"
" Love and Loyalty Runs Deeper Than Blood!"
"A wise girl kisses, but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, leaves b4 shes left."

thx so much i didn't really think my poe was that good but i will be looking for the rest of your story, later though , because i have to get to class, lol

on Nov. 30 2011 at 8:49 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
1 article 0 photos 629 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

This is very interesting, I think I like how you mixed rhyming stazas and nonryming stanzas, its unique! The first two and the last two lines where my favorite, that is a very good thing because it pulls them in and leaves them satisfied. The theme is good too, it tells me why you were so interested in my ghost story, lol! I hope your able to read the finnished version when it is published, I added some stanzas and fixed up the old ones. Anyhow, great work!


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