Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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sassypoet555 said...
on Mar. 11 2010 at 10:02 am
Very good use of symbolism throughout your poem.

timmyb said...
on Mar. 11 2010 at 10:02 am
this is so true

bigpapa said...
on Mar. 11 2010 at 10:00 am
This is AMAZING!!!!!!! keep up the good poems!!!

joshow said...
on Mar. 11 2010 at 9:57 am
this is a great poem

LaReSt said...
on Mar. 10 2010 at 10:05 am
I have but it is a religious one. I am wating to see my work get published here. Hopefully it will be soon.

on Mar. 10 2010 at 7:57 am
allie.vgr1994 SILVER, Manton, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"People die...so love them everyday,
Beauty fades...so look before it's gone,
Love Changes...but not the love you give,
And if you love, You will never be alone."

"Every day is hard,
Nobody knows how hard it is for me,
every day is kewl tho."

I think it was one of the greatest things ever!!!!!! Have you writen anything like this?

on Mar. 10 2010 at 7:55 am
allie.vgr1994 SILVER, Manton, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People die...so love them everyday,
Beauty fades...so look before it's gone,
Love Changes...but not the love you give,
And if you love, You will never be alone."

"Every day is hard,
Nobody knows how hard it is for me,
every day is kewl tho."

Yeah it was great I would agree!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥

on Mar. 10 2010 at 7:53 am
allie.vgr1994 SILVER, Manton, Michigan
7 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People die...so love them everyday,
Beauty fades...so look before it's gone,
Love Changes...but not the love you give,
And if you love, You will never be alone."

"Every day is hard,
Nobody knows how hard it is for me,
every day is kewl tho."

It was really good!!!!!! I really love people who express their feelings in that way!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥

ToyRe GOLD said...
on Mar. 9 2010 at 6:58 am
ToyRe GOLD, Monterey, California
12 articles 3 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This too shall pass." and " When God leads to a cliff, jump, because He'll either catch you or teach you how to fly."

It's saying how a parent can tell you you can do anything and/or be anything but in the end they are the ones who try to hold you back be it for a reason like they aren't ready for you to go or selfish reasons.

ToyRe GOLD said...
on Mar. 9 2010 at 6:56 am
ToyRe GOLD, Monterey, California
12 articles 3 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This too shall pass." and " When God leads to a cliff, jump, because He'll either catch you or teach you how to fly."

This is one of the best poems I have read. Good Job!!!

on Mar. 8 2010 at 9:40 pm
chrissmd SILVER, Woonsocket, Rhode Island
7 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you find yourself in love with a person who does not love you, be gentle with yourself. There is nothing wrong with you. Love just didn't choose to rest in the other person's heart."

this is so good... i love the symbolism you used. great job!

on Mar. 8 2010 at 4:35 pm
justbreathe.... BRONZE, N/a, South Carolina
4 articles 0 photos 82 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how bad things get, there is always something that you don\'t know about just yet.

I really like it. And apparently so does everyone else. 473??!! Keep up the good work!

on Mar. 8 2010 at 4:25 pm
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Life's a mountain on a beach"-Unknown
"Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It's remarkable how often those two traits coincide."-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

lol, it's ok. Imagery is good

adam17 said...
on Mar. 8 2010 at 11:45 am
adam17, Parkesburg, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
hi

i dont get it

on Mar. 8 2010 at 9:03 am
CHEERLEADER~4~life BRONZE, Parkesburg, Pennsylvania
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i really liked your poem...keep up the good work!!!!

:D

on Mar. 7 2010 at 8:47 pm
peace.frog.271 BRONZE, Pinehurst, North Carolina
3 articles 2 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Let us remember as we chase our dreams into the stars that our first responsibility is to our Earth, to our children, to ourselves." -George W. Bush

This means to me that before we let ourselves fade, we must take care of ourselves and others.

er... imaginary, or imagery? sorry, I have a sick case of OCD.. hehe

Wayne92 GOLD said...
on Mar. 6 2010 at 9:08 am
Wayne92 GOLD, Beaumont, Texas
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Your poem was very visual the picture of a boy wanting to go beyond grounds but at the end you was bound heck ima be able to write like this amazing keep it up

on Mar. 4 2010 at 7:51 pm
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
70 articles 0 photos 181 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a mountain on a beach"-Unknown
"Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It's remarkable how often those two traits coincide."-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

I really love this, cool. It flows together good and the imaginary is awesome! :)

Ralin said...
on Mar. 4 2010 at 4:28 pm
Ralin, Columbus, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
“We must listen before we can learn.
We must learn before we can prepare.
We must prepare before we can serve.
We must serve before we can lead.”

i thought that your piece is beautifully put together. i love the way you let your thoughts out on paper... or online lol like i do. u should try to enter in on a contest

liblib33 GOLD said...
on Mar. 3 2010 at 8:28 pm
liblib33 GOLD, Dedham, Massachusetts
18 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life sucks then you die-- yeah I should be so lucky.
--Jacob "Breaking Dawn"

I could only wish to write something like this. Great job!!!!


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