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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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colinfisgay123 said...
Jan. 8, 2010 at 8:42 am
I wish to make love to you when you are begging for it.
 
AbbyQ This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 26, 2010 at 11:14 pm
Really? come on. keep it clean, guys.
 
evrycloudyday7 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 7, 2010 at 7:42 pm
I thought it was very good. The first couple of sentences drew me in! Great job!
 
cookiemonstergurl333 said...
Jan. 6, 2010 at 7:06 pm
this poem is great! great rhythm throughout it! I wish i could write something that good! If this poem had rainbow sox, it would knock them right off! lol
 
L5L5 said...
Jan. 6, 2010 at 11:16 am
Very strong. I enjoyed reading it. Makes me realize how much i miss my childhood.
Every sentence waas poweful..except maybe 4 the as "i saw the birdie.."
 
MarinaNicole said...
Jan. 5, 2010 at 10:12 pm
I like the rhythm that the rhyming forms-- really nice. But I'm a little confused on the concept of the poem. That's just me though, the poem was awesome. Loved it.
 
MatthewZ said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 8:03 pm
nice! look at my poem too plz? http ://www.teenink .com /poetry/free_verse/article/156195/Airplanes/ rate and comment plz! thanks a million!
 
Michael T. This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 6:30 pm
This is really good I mean great! The title was a little awkword though
 
Sr09 said...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 3:11 pm
Nice Poem ;) Very creative!
 
kiwi12 said...
Jan. 3, 2010 at 3:37 pm
It flows very well. I like it. It also reminds me a bit of Shel Silverstein.
swimming and flying.... all good stuff!
 
CUTIC0314 said...
Dec. 30, 2009 at 10:37 pm
i love this poem its so pretty.... whoever wrote this is a good poem writer
 
jake2011 said...
Dec. 30, 2009 at 5:43 pm
I thought the whole poem was excellent. Keep writing.
 
averagejoe said...
Dec. 30, 2009 at 1:30 pm
i liked how you started flying, it was really imaginative.
 
forever casie said...
Dec. 30, 2009 at 12:15 pm
I think this is very powerful great job.
 
Ann_Hill789 said...
Dec. 29, 2009 at 8:49 pm
i love it! i wish my stuff was HALF as good as this...
 
sesababi said...
Dec. 29, 2009 at 3:04 pm
Woooooow. this is absoultly amazing
 
Ellie_Michelle said...
Dec. 27, 2009 at 8:19 pm
That's really cool!
 
LaughingAtBananas said...
Dec. 27, 2009 at 9:26 am
WOW This is amazing! So inspiring
 
fall_from_grace said...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 10:13 pm
This is sooooo good! I want to read more!!!!!
 
fall_from_grace said...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 10:06 pm
You are remarkable. I really adore this poem. It's complex and figurative enough to make you reread it, but somehow communicative enough to express pure feeling.
 
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