Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.






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Shabanana said...
Mar. 17, 2010 at 11:04 am
I really enjoyed so poem so thank you!! I wrote a poem also about people not understanding how important family and friends are and it is also very deep. Check it out i think you might like it. its called Reflections.
 
yesimdarrian101 said...
Mar. 15, 2010 at 5:28 pm
I thought this poem was incredible. I can really relate to feeling like my parents are encouraging me, yet holding me back at the same time. amazing job. :)
 
Bree14 said...
Mar. 15, 2010 at 3:45 pm
Great job!!!!!
 
OliviaMiaKing said...
Mar. 15, 2010 at 3:20 pm
Wonderful.
 
awesome said...
Mar. 15, 2010 at 9:05 am
This is an awesome
 
Lisha said...
Mar. 14, 2010 at 9:38 am
Beautiful :)
 
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Mar. 29, 2010 at 10:59 am
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Alexis M. said...
Mar. 13, 2010 at 11:03 am
This poem is really good you are very poetic
 
starlight26:) said...
Mar. 13, 2010 at 10:24 am
Beautiful Poem!!! I loved It!!!
 
aspiring.author.09 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 6:40 pm
I do not understand this poem...could someone summarize/explain?
 
JohnO. replied...
Mar. 13, 2010 at 9:18 am
The key is in the title. Yes, this poem is a little strange. But the "bound" part is like the placenta in the womb. He does this weird change up from talking about jumping off the edge to being in the womb. It's....different.
 
aspiring.author.09 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 13, 2010 at 1:08 pm
Thank you for your help. I love the uniqueness of this poem and your explanation has helped me to further enjoy it. :)
 
JohnO. replied...
Mar. 13, 2010 at 3:34 pm
welcome. :) Hopefull one of my poems will be up here.
 
bubblebuttjoe said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 1:57 pm
i didnt think that this was the best i think the end was like really weird ahahah:)
 
Iferrer said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 12:09 pm
I like this poem, the ways that you show of how encouraging your father can be to your interests is very cool.
 
BOBRETSMITH said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 10:13 am
we have to break free from what our parents tell us to do, and make our own path in life.
 
bobjoe said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 10:09 am
this poem has a lot of meaning. It shows how parents encourage you but still hold you back
 
hahaha said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 10:05 am
i think that i like this because the dad was being honest with his daughter
 
Shabanana replied...
Mar. 17, 2010 at 11:00 am
its the son not the daughter
 
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