Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

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starlight26:) said...
Mar. 13, 2010 at 10:24 am
Beautiful Poem!!! I loved It!!!
 
aspiring.author.09 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 6:40 pm
I do not understand this poem...could someone summarize/explain?
 
JohnO. replied...
Mar. 13, 2010 at 9:18 am
The key is in the title. Yes, this poem is a little strange. But the "bound" part is like the placenta in the womb. He does this weird change up from talking about jumping off the edge to being in the womb. It's....different.
 
aspiring.author.09 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 13, 2010 at 1:08 pm
Thank you for your help. I love the uniqueness of this poem and your explanation has helped me to further enjoy it. :)
 
JohnO. replied...
Mar. 13, 2010 at 3:34 pm
welcome. :) Hopefull one of my poems will be up here.
 
bubblebuttjoe said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 1:57 pm
i didnt think that this was the best i think the end was like really weird ahahah:)
 
Iferrer said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 12:09 pm
I like this poem, the ways that you show of how encouraging your father can be to your interests is very cool.
 
BOBRETSMITH said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 10:13 am
we have to break free from what our parents tell us to do, and make our own path in life.
 
bobjoe said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 10:09 am
this poem has a lot of meaning. It shows how parents encourage you but still hold you back
 
hahaha said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 10:05 am
i think that i like this because the dad was being honest with his daughter
 
Shabanana replied...
Mar. 17, 2010 at 11:00 am
its the son not the daughter
 
perry the platupus said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 10:02 am
this poem made me want to cry deeply in the cry cry
 
sassypoet555 said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 10:02 am
Very good use of symbolism throughout your poem.
 
timmyb said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 10:02 am
this is so true
 
bigpapa said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 10:00 am
This is AMAZING!!!!!!! keep up the good poems!!!
 
joshow said...
Mar. 11, 2010 at 9:57 am
this is a great poem
 
allie.vgr1994 said...
Mar. 10, 2010 at 7:53 am
It was really good!!!!!! I really love people who express their feelings in that way!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥!♥
 
LaReSt This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 9, 2010 at 6:56 am
This is one of the best poems I have read. Good Job!!!
 
allie.vgr1994 replied...
Mar. 10, 2010 at 7:57 am
I think it was one of the greatest things ever!!!!!! Have you writen anything like this?
 
LaReSt replied...
Mar. 10, 2010 at 10:05 am
I have but it is a religious one. I am wating to see my work get published here. Hopefully it will be soon.
 
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