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It is something that I can't describe
I turn my head
All of the lights consume me
They dance in their beautiful costumes
Filling the night sky
Small children stare with wonder and excitement
Their little fingers point to one light
While they describe every detail of its journey
The sparks come down to earth
They invite you to join them
When you rise up
They show off their beauty and grace
Taking you to far off places
Where only happiness lives
When they display their grand finally
Millions of people cheer
Roaring like the one of a jungle cat
While you dancing lights take a bow
And walk off stage




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swifthearth said...
Nov. 26, 2011 at 8:55 pm:
I liked it. The wording was good and every aspect played into its flow.
 
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pinkowlThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 11:03 pm:
SO CUTE. made me think of my early childhood!
 
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savetheplanetThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 11:00 pm:
AWESOME POEM! <3 So pretty...
 
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sweetheart2598 said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 6:01 pm:
THANX 4 ALL THE COMMENTS GUYS
 
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slaborin98 said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 5:38 pm:
i think you have a gift for taking things so small and turning it into something BIG
 
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thefamoustapper said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 5:31 pm:
beautiful! never thought of it like this! fantastically written
 
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dbk1098This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 5:31 pm:
Love this!!! 
 
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cookiegirl said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 9:06 am:
Wow, this is well written:). this poem is beautiful.
 
AnimaCordis replied...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 5:29 pm :

I really love this, it's beautiful

The ending was wonderful.

 
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sweetheart2598 said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 9:16 pm:

Thank Ya'll for all the nice comments

THANK U and i'll try to read some of ya'lls writing as well

TANKS SO MUCH

 

 
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Heck_No_Cheerios said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 9:05 pm:
Oh wow! This is wonderful, I love the image it creates. You can just picture the children all excited pointing and shouting in their excitement of the bright lights you describe.
 
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megsloveslions said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 8:26 pm:
I love it! I really liked the descriptions!
 
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ByThisBlindingLightThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 8:22 pm:
-gasp- :D that's soo pretty!! omg I love it.. it's so lively and exciting
 
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Wonderment said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 8:22 pm:
 l love this. I love the images it paints, I love the metaphors, I love the way it is. Great poem!
 
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Loki17This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 4:28 pm:
Great metaphors and imagery!
 
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Neytiri said...
Nov. 24, 2011 at 4:24 pm:
It's beautiful sweetheart!!!! I love that time of year and you portrayed it so beautifully!!x x x x
 
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sweetheart2598 said...
Nov. 23, 2011 at 2:54 pm:
Thanks for all the comments and ratings
 
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Kayla12w said...
Nov. 23, 2011 at 2:44 pm:

I like it... I'm just kidding, I really don't.

 

 

I LOVE IT!!!

 

 
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M_IMLThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 23, 2011 at 2:33 pm:

very nice :) love that you took something a lot of people take a little bit for granted and made it so special!

also the "dancing lights" part is great...beautiful. 

 
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Akane-Ree said...
Nov. 23, 2011 at 2:13 pm:
s is beautiful. though it might not have been the meaning, it reminded me a lot of the auroras....
 
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