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Her smooth fingers
Coat a car windshield
With sun-kissed cream.
Dipped in butter soap,
Sponges soak up dirt,
Reveal the lost glimmer.
She sprays hose-water
Like an April shower,
Onto the glossy hood.
Her shiny reflection
Meanders in droplets
Down metallic doors.
Froth tickles her toes
As a bubble of delight
Escapes from pink lips;
It frolics with soapsuds,
Dancing to the melody
Of her sweet laughter.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.





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cross-i'd-leopard said...
Apr. 20, 2009 at 3:28 am:
I agree with what feedback said. If u love this girl, add more about what makes her great. If it's just a plain old girl, then u need to add some other kind of meaning.
 
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Miranda M. said...
Apr. 16, 2009 at 12:03 am:
omg i love love love this poem
 
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explicit1 said...
Apr. 14, 2009 at 12:36 pm:
that was awesome imagery that a true poet would recognize!! love it!!
 
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Holly G. said...
Mar. 25, 2009 at 4:28 pm:
This was great, like a snapshot of one summer memory. I love dhow you took a simple task and broke it apart into a beautiful and fufilling work of art. Keep up the good work!
 
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feedback said...
Mar. 25, 2009 at 5:56 pm:
it doesnt have any feelings
if you are writing about somthing you love, then try to make people smile when they read it
if your are writing about somthing you hate then make people feel your anger or your pain when they read it
make their eyebrows burrow
make it so the reader cant help but have an expression

you as a writer i think you have talent but your poem could be a lot better
i now im not a professional but that just my advice and my honest opini... (more »)
 
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sunnynerd said...
Jan. 31, 2009 at 10:46 pm:
this was really great, your a great writer

keep up the good work:)
 
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gabby32 said...
Jan. 13, 2009 at 3:40 am:
this was a cool piece, it made me think of washing the car in summertime. nice.
 
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*almost_there* said...
Jan. 3, 2009 at 11:28 pm:
I love how you take an ordinary task such as washing a car and give it such romance and appeal. This is really good!
 
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word_addict said...
Dec. 19, 2008 at 1:18 am:
i really like it. its simple and to the point. it makes me thing of arizona in the summer and being in the scorching heat and the water feels so good because its so hot. captures it perfectly. :)
 
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HannyBelle said...
Dec. 17, 2008 at 4:16 am:
Wonderful poem. It brings out the true, and curious child that is within all teens. Great work, It is a very refreshing poem.
 
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jade112255 said...
Dec. 11, 2008 at 9:16 pm:
boring
 
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Redemption65 said...
Dec. 9, 2008 at 9:15 pm:
I don't get it? What is the point? Yes, people like hidden meanings, but this secret message needs and answer key.
 
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horsesonthebrain said...
Dec. 9, 2008 at 3:55 am:
i dont think she is in love with the girl next door...it just seems like an expression of young happiness, i remember always loving washing cars when i was younger. Awesome poem!
 
tyhsu replied...
Nov. 22, 2009 at 5:13 pm :
i am in love the girl next door
 
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Calvin87 said...
Nov. 18, 2008 at 4:27 pm:
This is so good. I love it.
 
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LiVe N lEt LiVe said...
Nov. 17, 2008 at 10:03 pm:
Are you in love with the girl next door? I think you mean for this to sound deeper than it really is! i understand the concept! your way of exaggerating works! There's passion!
 
ttff replied...
Nov. 22, 2009 at 5:11 pm :
ya i am in love
 
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redthe great said...
Nov. 12, 2008 at 9:54 pm:
what are you talking about maybe i am not reading it well but i dont know what you are talking about. the reason i ask is because it sounds as if you have deeper meaning but i just cant figure it.
 
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