Sweet Scrub MAG

April 19, 2008
By Kara Wang, Saratoga, CA

Her smooth fingers
Coat a car windshield
With sun-kissed cream.
Dipped in butter soap,
Sponges soak up dirt,
Reveal the lost glimmer.
She sprays hose-water
Like an April shower,
Onto the glossy hood.
Her shiny reflection
Meanders in droplets
Down metallic doors.
Froth tickles her toes
As a bubble of delight
Escapes from pink lips;
It frolics with soapsuds,
Dancing to the melody
Of her sweet laughter.



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on Nov. 25 2009 at 5:41 pm
alexisjo SILVER, Roanoke, Texas
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fearless doesn't mean you're unafraid, it means you're terrified, but you jump anyway. <3

Omgshhh (: this was ah-maze-ing (: verrry descriptive (:

tyhsu said...
on Nov. 22 2009 at 5:13 pm
i am in love the girl next door

ttff said...
on Nov. 22 2009 at 5:11 pm
ya i am in love

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on Nov. 15 2009 at 12:01 pm
Lanae BRONZE, Milford, Indiana
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"'For I know the plans I have for you,' Declares the LORD, 'Plans to prosper you and not to harm you. Plans to give you a hope and a future.'" Jeremiah 29:11

Great description!!! <3d it! =)

on Nov. 8 2009 at 8:50 pm
ariwrites94 GOLD, Deltona, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet." ---Plato

Wonderful job!!!! you are a talented writer and keep up the good work! if u have time please check out my poem called "Sensitive Am I" and rate and leave a comment. Thanks and keep writing!

on Jul. 3 2009 at 3:12 pm
emajin96! BRONZE, Millersville, Maryland
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wow, great poem!!! i loved all the imagery! this really is amazing. keep on writing, please! :)

on May. 2 2009 at 1:55 pm
hope.floats BRONZE, Sunfield, Michigan
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Love love love this. =)

on Apr. 20 2009 at 3:28 am
I agree with what feedback said. If u love this girl, add more about what makes her great. If it's just a plain old girl, then u need to add some other kind of meaning.

on Apr. 16 2009 at 12:03 am
Miranda Myers BRONZE, Colleyville, Texas
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omg i love love love this poem

on Apr. 14 2009 at 12:36 pm
explicit1 BRONZE, Chicago, Illinois
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that was awesome imagery that a true poet would recognize!! love it!!

feedback said...
on Mar. 25 2009 at 5:56 pm
it doesnt have any feelings

if you are writing about somthing you love, then try to make people smile when they read it

if your are writing about somthing you hate then make people feel your anger or your pain when they read it

make their eyebrows burrow

make it so the reader cant help but have an expression



you as a writer i think you have talent but your poem could be a lot better

i now im not a professional but that just my advice and my honest opinion

dont give up keep goinggg!

on Mar. 25 2009 at 4:28 pm
Holly Grosholz, Marcellus, New York
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This was great, like a snapshot of one summer memory. I love dhow you took a simple task and broke it apart into a beautiful and fufilling work of art. Keep up the good work!

sunnynerd said...
on Jan. 31 2009 at 10:46 pm
this was really great, your a great writer



keep up the good work:)

gabby32 said...
on Jan. 13 2009 at 3:40 am
this was a cool piece, it made me think of washing the car in summertime. nice.

on Jan. 3 2009 at 11:28 pm
I love how you take an ordinary task such as washing a car and give it such romance and appeal. This is really good!

word_addict said...
on Dec. 19 2008 at 1:18 am
i really like it. its simple and to the point. it makes me thing of arizona in the summer and being in the scorching heat and the water feels so good because its so hot. captures it perfectly. :)

HannyBelle said...
on Dec. 17 2008 at 4:16 am
Wonderful poem. It brings out the true, and curious child that is within all teens. Great work, It is a very refreshing poem.

jade112255 said...
on Dec. 11 2008 at 9:16 pm
boring

Redemption65 said...
on Dec. 9 2008 at 9:15 pm
I don't get it? What is the point? Yes, people like hidden meanings, but this secret message needs and answer key.

on Dec. 9 2008 at 3:55 am
i dont think she is in love with the girl next door...it just seems like an expression of young happiness, i remember always loving washing cars when i was younger. Awesome poem!


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