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Her smooth fingers
Coat a car windshield
With sun-kissed cream.
Dipped in butter soap,
Sponges soak up dirt,
Reveal the lost glimmer.
She sprays hose-water
Like an April shower,
Onto the glossy hood.
Her shiny reflection
Meanders in droplets
Down metallic doors.
Froth tickles her toes
As a bubble of delight
Escapes from pink lips;
It frolics with soapsuds,
Dancing to the melody
Of her sweet laughter.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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Sollucks said...
today at 10:52 am:
Like everyone else said, great imagery it's truly amazing
 
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itserraticThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sep. 30 at 5:58 pm:
Very good visual imagery. I love it!!!!!!!!!!!
 
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Bella13This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Sep. 13 at 1:25 pm:
Its so adorable!
 
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Bella13This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 26 at 9:01 pm:
This poem is amazing. It completely transported me to a new place!
 
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Theexplicableordinary said...
Jun. 14 at 6:44 pm:
I love this...your so talented in describing and visualizing
 
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spiria said...
Jan. 29 at 1:05 am:
Very sweet. :)  
 
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Ghoshy said...
Dec. 25, 2012 at 4:47 pm:
I love that you can picture this poem perfectly in your head. It has great descriptions... Good job!
 
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Elli A. said...
Nov. 8, 2012 at 3:25 pm:
I really enjoyed reading this poem! I love happy, joyful tone.  I also like how this flows; it's not too choppy.  Great job!
 
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ChrisJThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 20, 2012 at 2:36 pm:
This was just great! It is very creative, kept me intriqued, nd really does deserve to be in the magazine for all to see!
 
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Kenziemcm13 said...
Jun. 5, 2012 at 9:18 pm:
I liked it! Can you go check out some of my work I would be ever s grateful to hear what your opinions on them are! I would be honored for someone of your skill to read/rate comment on some of mine! :)
 
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loveroffashionandwritingThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 19, 2012 at 10:30 pm:
I liked the use of imagery and word choice... not very deep but it was short, sweet and a light read. Good job!
 
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Grace S. said...
Apr. 19, 2012 at 1:46 pm:
Your writing is beautiful, yet it lacks a creative plot. Next time, try to write about something with more meaning! Great structure though!
 
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EliteCobra9000 said...
Apr. 19, 2012 at 10:51 am:
"as a bubble of delight escapes from pink lips"....what is this?? are you joking? i mean i get where you are coming from on the whole imagery thing with the girl washing the car, but seriously? what did she do, stick her head in the bubble water and blow some bubbles with her mouth? i just dont understand why this was put in the poem because it couldnt make any less sense in the context of the poem. Great job!
 
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Blueeyedgirl18 said...
Jan. 3, 2012 at 10:59 am:
Very descriptive:) great job:)
 
hunniebunnie replied...
Apr. 2, 2012 at 11:47 am :
this is amazing gr8 job
 
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Big k said...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 10:06 am:
this was a wierd poem buthas its good too
 
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dakotawright said...
Nov. 28, 2011 at 11:02 am:

Good Imagery. I really liked this short and sweet poem.

 

 
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artmantist said...
Nov. 19, 2011 at 5:31 pm:

hello, nice poem. Would u guys wanna check out my work. its called the cottage 

thank u

 
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Natasha1994 said...
Nov. 10, 2011 at 1:13 pm:
i think this poem is more for guys than girls good job though
 
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Lexie96 said...
Oct. 25, 2011 at 6:26 pm:
Good piece, you make it sound like a fun job... Check out my work?
 
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