Sweet Scrub

I liked the use of imagery and word choice... not very deep but it was short, sweet and a light read. Good job!

Your writing is beautiful, yet it lacks a creative plot. Next time, try to write about something with more meaning! Great structure though!

"as a bubble of delight escapes from pink lips"....what is this?? are you joking? i mean i get where you are coming from on the whole imagery thing with the girl washing the car, but seriously? what did she do, stick her head in the bubble water and blow some bubbles with her mouth? i just dont understand why this was put in the poem because it couldnt make any less sense in the context of the poem. Great job!

Very descriptive:) great job:)

this was a wierd poem buthas its good too

Good Imagery. I really liked this short and sweet poem.

 

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i think this poem is more for guys than girls good job though

Good piece, you make it sound like a fun job... Check out my work?

Really loved it!

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I never thought that anyone could ever make a chore sound fun!!!!!!

 

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That was cool to read, it kinf of makes me want to wash my car now

wow i loved how you made washing a car sound glamourous!

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I loved how i felt like i was there well i read it, i could see the water.. and the bubbles! amazing!

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This poem has a refreshing lightheartedness to it

This poem reminds me of when I wash a car and just whenever I have fun with water. It just totally gets all those emotions into one piece of poetry. 

I think it was very nice you should definatly write more

It was great imagery, in every line.

hahahajhaHA NICE

I really like how, by adding description, you can take something so simple as washing a car and turn it into something spectacular.

I love imagery poetry like this. In many ways, it is better than telling a story with a poem because I like to walk away from a poem with a feeling or a picture in my head of what I just read. This was really great.

I really, really like the imagery of the poem.  It is simple but it paints such a pretty picture in one's head.

I LOVE the last four lines in this. so beautifully written. 

Wow. very blissful. i can't help but smiling :)

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so sweet and moving! i loved it! your similes were awesome and your choice of words was amazing!

i don't understand this poem can someone please explain?

Very discreptive I loved it

Aww! That was so "bubbly". And fun. I loved it. (:

i really enjoyed reading this poem. it was really cute.

this is a really well writen poem...
i really enjoyed reading it....keep it up!
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so i realy happy for that poeme u just give it to me and i thank's u for that thank u so much.

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how cute, very good

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i really like this
love the details!
keep writing

Omgshhh (: this was ah-maze-ing (: verrry descriptive (:

Great description!!! <3d it! =)