Sweet Dream

November 1, 2011
By TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
8 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever, love like there is no tomorrow, dance like there is no one watching.


I reach out
to embrace the earth
of soft cotton
and cushy ground
with little worms hidden.
I close my eyes to see
the round orange sun dancing
beneath my eyes.
My lips part
in a smile
like no other.
I leap up
and run.
My glorious
white train
flowing behind me.
Fresh moist air
pushes its way into
my nose.
Nothing more
perfect than this.
Just when I see my prince
in shining armor
awaiting me on his
white stallion…
I wake up.


The author's comments:
Just a fun piece I hope everyone enjoys

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Saturn. BRONZE said...
on Dec. 15 2015 at 11:49 pm
Saturn. BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
"The mind is better than the sword"
-Unknown (I'm too lazy to look it up)
"All warfare is based on deception"
-Sun Tzu

Beautiful, vivid, and that whole waking up thing? I'm surprised no one else put 'I can relate'.

on Mar. 21 2012 at 4:48 pm
Kit-Kait BRONZE, Amherst, Virginia
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I know this sounds petty... but it's great, and nothing can change that. I love poems, and I especially love ones that show real emotion and tenderness. I don't think I'll ever forget this one... if I do, can you slap me?

on Feb. 5 2012 at 7:05 pm
Angelgirl39 GOLD, Monument, Colorado
13 articles 5 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"I can sum up all I have learned about life in three words: It goes on\"
~Robert Frost

\"Those who dream by day are often more aware of things then those who dream only by night\"
~Edgar Allan Poe

I love this poem, it's really good. :)

on Dec. 17 2011 at 8:32 pm
CarrieAnn13 GOLD, Goodsoil, Other
12 articles 10 photos 1648 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love deadlines. I like the whooshing sound they make as they fly by." --Douglas Adams

"The object of life is not to be on the side of the majority, but to escape finding oneself in the ranks of the insane." --Marcus Aurelius

This is an excellent poem!  I love the vivid imagery and the ending is sort of predictable, but very nice.  I truly appreciate the effort you put into proper punctuation.  Not many poets bother with it, which really annoys me.  So again, excellent work!

on Dec. 11 2011 at 10:07 am
LoganMarie14 GOLD, Lynchburg, Virginia
15 articles 15 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
“So it's not gonna be easy. It's going to be really hard; we're gonna have to work at this everyday, but I want to do that because I want you. I want all of you, forever, everyday. You and me... everyday." -The Notebook

aww, this is so beautiful! I love how you detailed the smallest things, but they made the largest difference. Check out my new work, will ya?(:

RMicchelle said...
on Dec. 3 2011 at 4:21 pm
RMicchelle, Corry, Pennsylvania
0 articles 0 photos 75 comments

Favorite Quote:
You don't have to like me... I like myself, and that's enough

"When life gives you lemons it better give you sugar too or your lemonade is going to suck."

Defiantely one of my favorite peices, sounds alot like dreams i have lol

on Dec. 3 2011 at 2:03 pm
Plain-Jane ELITE, Grandview, Missouri
108 articles 2 photos 76 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And the Lamb at the center of the throne will be their Shepherd. He will guide them to springs of living water; and God will wipe away every tear from their eyes." Revelation 7:17

Love the topic especially! well written!

tiptop said...
on Dec. 3 2011 at 1:50 pm
tiptop, --, Other
0 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
heaven is a place / a place where nothing / nothing ever happens.

i like the abruptness of the ending, and this poem is awesome.  but i also feel like you could really go into the fantasy a bit more and have some fun--like discuss dream like sensations of "cushy" in more deatail...but it has a lovely sort of drowsy dream like quality already--phantasmagorical (my fav word totally applies to this poem).

on Dec. 2 2011 at 8:46 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Awwww, this is so beautiful, definitely just like a dream :) 

 


EMMA said...
on Dec. 1 2011 at 10:56 am
HI CASS, I WAS REALLY DEPRESSED AFTER LEAVING THE VET. YES. EMMA IS NOT A GIRL. ITS SAM. I THINK I WILL KEEP HIM ANYWAY.HE IS PRETTY CUTE. LOVE AUNT JO.

emma said...
on Nov. 30 2011 at 6:57 am
dear cassidy, i see your beauty on the outside, now you are sharing the beauty behind those deep brown eyes. loved it aunt jo.

Neytiri GOLD said...
on Nov. 26 2011 at 4:40 pm
Neytiri GOLD, Hilo, Hawaii
14 articles 0 photos 67 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live as if you'll die today. Dream as if you'll live forever.

O my God, I always have dreams like this one!!!! This is an unbelievably impressive poem and I love it!!! x x x x x x <3<3

on Nov. 26 2011 at 4:23 pm
Wonderment DIAMOND, Scranton, Pennsylvania
75 articles 0 photos 142 comments

This is my second time reading this poem, and i like it just as much as I did, the first time I read it

 


on Nov. 26 2011 at 11:10 am
KityraAnderson PLATINUM, Mercer Island, Washington
41 articles 1 photo 56 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nothing matters more than those who depend on you, emotionally or physically. Even if the situation is life or death, you have to be there for them, because they need you.

OMG IT WAS AWESOME, ESPECIALLY THE ENDING!!!! "I wake up" !!!! AWESOMENESS!!!

on Nov. 26 2011 at 11:09 am
GabriellaRoars PLATINUM, Madison, Wisconsin
23 articles 1 photo 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"....I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad, The dreams in which I'm dying are the best I've ever had...."
-Tears of Fears-Mad World

this is great!

TapTap SILVER said...
on Nov. 25 2011 at 8:04 pm
TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
8 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever, love like there is no tomorrow, dance like there is no one watching.

Thank you so much everybody it means so much! Also I want 2 say that I will always return the favor if you comment! Thanks again!

on Nov. 25 2011 at 5:20 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1985 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

OHH the ending!! >.< Thats a cool way of ending it though. I was in a state of clear bliss while I was reading then the ending like dropped me, lol. Very good work:))

Akane-Ree said...
on Nov. 25 2011 at 4:30 pm
I liked this a lot. this happens to me. ALL THE TIME. and i hate that moment where you wake up, and for a second you think it was all real.... nicely written :)

on Nov. 25 2011 at 4:22 pm
Wonderment DIAMOND, Scranton, Pennsylvania
75 articles 0 photos 142 comments
I likeit. You are very good at decritpions and you paint a picture well. Good suff! :)

kittens777 said...
on Nov. 19 2011 at 7:58 am
Love it!  Your description is wonderful!!




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