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Staring at those beautiful stars closer to the heaven,
I dream of you with my eyes open.

The moon like a ball of snow,
appears so dull when compared to 'your glow'.

With every lonely moment becoming darker and colder,
I wish you were here with your head on my shoulder.

As dawn sets in and as stars become few,
I swear darling that i will always love you...



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InvisibleHeart said...
Jan. 5, 2012 at 12:26 pm:
cute!! I really like this
 
Naman replied...
Jan. 5, 2012 at 12:48 pm :
Thanks a lot :)
 
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Fizzy_Girl said...
Jan. 5, 2012 at 8:23 am:
really sweet n beautiful poem. 5/5 stars! :) wud u mind to check out some of my work?
 
Naman replied...
Jan. 5, 2012 at 11:33 am :
Thank You :) Sure
 
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MiraStorm This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 4, 2012 at 1:23 pm:
so sweet! i love the second line "i dream of you with eyes open".
 
Naman replied...
Jan. 4, 2012 at 1:25 pm :
thank you..i do love that line as well :)
 
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BellaChance said...
Jan. 4, 2012 at 12:53 pm:
really good!! (: super cute
 
Naman replied...
Jan. 4, 2012 at 12:55 pm :
Thanks a ton (:
 
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Sarakins said...
Jan. 4, 2012 at 12:44 pm:
Made me cry. Guys can be so romantic :')
 
Naman replied...
Jan. 4, 2012 at 12:47 pm :
Thank You :) They say u can never understand a girl..that certainly applies for men as well!!
 
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Tbug1997 said...
Dec. 24, 2011 at 8:05 am:
Very pretty i like it
 
Naman replied...
Dec. 24, 2011 at 8:06 am :
thank u :)
 
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siahillon said...
Dec. 24, 2011 at 7:50 am:
last line is breath taking yaaaar....
 
Naman replied...
Dec. 24, 2011 at 7:51 am :
thank u :)
 
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MisticleMystery said...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 2:15 pm:
WOW...!!!!!!!!!!!
 
Naman replied...
Dec. 16, 2011 at 12:27 pm :
thank you :)
 
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crazycoolcritter said...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 1:56 pm:

awwwwwwwww!!! :)

 

...please check out, rate, and comment on my work too. THanks! I appreciate it! :)

 
Naman replied...
Dec. 16, 2011 at 12:26 pm :
thank you
ya definitely :)
 
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Naman said...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 1:30 am:
Thank you :)
 
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Arpit said...
Dec. 15, 2011 at 1:27 am:
Seriously amazing dear..!! Keep it up man..!!
 
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