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Tinfoil Symphonies

November 3, 2011
By Hannibal_the_Vegetarian_Cannibal SILVER, A Nice Place In, Virginia
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&quot;Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass; it&#039;s about learning to dance in the rain.&quot; ~Anonymous<br /> <br /> <br /> &quot;For he loved her, as you can only love someone who is an echo of yourself in your time of deepest sorrow.&quot; ~ Orson Scott Card

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Tinfoil Symphonies upon the waves
Beyond the eager prow,
That reaches for them, strives for them,
But will never touch them now.

Yonder the muted horizon shines
With freckles that are ships,
Landmass is a memory
Among the clouds in wisps.

The prow strives on, reaching hard,
Obeying its Master’s word.
Tinfoil laughs and shakes her head;
Freer than a bird.

Symphonies shine and symphonies glow
Upon the stricken waves,
That gleam and glimmer in the light
Of Tinfoil’s laughing “heys!”

Nothing but the glistening waves,
And eager, reaching prow.
That will never in a lifetime reach
The Tinfoil Symphonies now.

© Rebecca Y., Los Angeles, CA

The author's comments:
I wrote this when I was on a boat, sitting at the prow. I was watching the play of the light on water, and then suddenly the phrase "Tinfoil Symphonies" came to mind. I have no idea what it came from, but from that (and lots of revision) I got this poem.
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TheAustinator SILVER said...
on Jan. 22 2012 at 5:06 pm
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This is awesome! It put's a picture in my mind like I was there seeing what you saw at the time you wrote this.
Hannibal_the_Vegetarian_Cannibal SILVER said...
on Dec. 11 2011 at 8:37 am
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Sure! It may take me a day or 2 to get around to it, as I'm really busy, but I'll definately do it. :)
Helena_Noel BRONZE said...
on Dec. 11 2011 at 7:26 am
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Holy cow, this is amazing! I love this! I think that tinfoil was the perfect metaphor for water. This is absolutly uniqe, I was smiling the whole time I was reading this. Gread job, five stars!

 

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on Nov. 27 2011 at 5:34 am
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This is really good, i think the picture you choose was near perfect!
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on Nov. 25 2011 at 1:20 pm
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I love this! It is so inceredibly full of detail and description. I feel like i am there with you looking at the ocean! amazing!!!