You Never Loved The Real Me

October 23, 2011
By RaveFire PLATINUM, Vancouver, Washington
RaveFire PLATINUM, Vancouver, Washington
32 articles 1 photo 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes You Have To Give Up Your Life To Save It." ~some book that i don't remember the name of

"Live Life Like There's No Yesterday" ~ random billboard

"If No One Can Hurt You, Then Nobody Loves You" ` ~ Kerli?


Something's not right
I just don't know what it is
I was so sad,
Doing stupid stuff
So I got help
It did help
Didn't it?
When I came back home
I expected everything to be perfect.
So why isn't it?
I tried so hard,
To change my whole being
I did everything so we could be happy
I went around with a smile on my face
Even though I was crying inside.
I told everyone I was fine
Even though I knew I wasn't
I pretended to be something I'm not...
Happy
I felt so worthless
I had to lie to make you love me
I wasn't allowed to be myself
Not if I wanted to be loved
Cuz you refused to love the real me
So day after day I go on
Every smile, another lie
Just another effort
To finally being loved.



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on Nov. 24 2011 at 5:19 pm
RaveFire PLATINUM, Vancouver, Washington
32 articles 1 photo 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes You Have To Give Up Your Life To Save It." ~some book that i don't remember the name of

"Live Life Like There's No Yesterday" ~ random billboard

"If No One Can Hurt You, Then Nobody Loves You" ` ~ Kerli?

thanks amanda. it was written mostly towards my mom but i dont think shes ever read it

on Nov. 23 2011 at 8:09 pm
Amanda24 DIAMOND, Lynnfield, Massachusetts
81 articles 14 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
" Move on. It's just a chapter in the past. But dont close the book, just turn the page.

This is deep!!!!!!

 

 


on Nov. 21 2011 at 4:56 pm
RaveFire PLATINUM, Vancouver, Washington
32 articles 1 photo 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes You Have To Give Up Your Life To Save It." ~some book that i don't remember the name of

"Live Life Like There's No Yesterday" ~ random billboard

"If No One Can Hurt You, Then Nobody Loves You" ` ~ Kerli?

i totally agree. theres just so much "stuff" that i did, I didn't really know how to say it. thank you though

on Nov. 16 2011 at 7:33 am
SpringRayyn PLATINUM, Lakeville, Minnesota
34 articles 2 photos 658 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't punish yourself," she heard her say again, but there would be punishment and pain, and there would be happiness too. That was writing."
--Markus Zusak, "The Book Thief"

I really like the last half, and how you described your emotions. But at the beginning, you could have been more descriptive, especially in the line "doing stupid stuff." It's way to vague. I understand that you may not have wanted to write it in a poem and post it online, but it makes the beginning a little bit off. If it makes it easier, you could write a poem as if you're writing about someone else, when really, you're talking about yourself (just a suggestion, you don't have to).




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