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She used to be jolly but after they did that she detested herself.
She used to be self assured; now she insicure, wondering if she's a waste of space.
She gave you people her all, but you proved thats she's worthless.
They took the fact that she was a lover and used it agenst her till she exploded.
You changed her, you messed with her head.
You lied to her, you said that you were her friends.
You played her, made her think that you were something else.
now she's broken. The only thing she did was trust you.
Right now she feels unloved, unwanted, AND UNCARED FOR.
She feels like me.
And that feeling is alone.



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IMAdreamerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 6, 2012 at 7:00 pm
I really like this! I Felt alone a lot before, I grew up teaching my self things the hard way since I didn't have people to help me. They were always busy. This poem is soooo easy to relate to, that is such a good thing for poems.( just so u know) nice job. Ps. Please read rate and comment on my work!!! Thx
 
illusions replied...
Apr. 11, 2012 at 8:51 am
Thank you! And i sure will. :):)
 
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 12:19 pm

So sad, your juxtoposition is really good. 

There were a few spelling mistakes; 'insicure' should be 'insecure', and you've got an extra s after 'that' in "but you proved thats she's worthless".

I imagine that your later work improves, as this is your first submition :)

 
Devils.Angel said...
Mar. 16, 2012 at 2:36 pm
I know exactly how she feels. Being used all the time and no one seems to care. Its not a good feeling its actually quiet terrible.......I loved the way you used her feelingts iin this poem.
 
illusions said...
Feb. 22, 2012 at 3:19 pm
thank you all for taking time to comment!
 
Iamhere4u This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 20, 2012 at 2:10 pm
So sad...:(
 
PoetryAngel14 said...
Feb. 16, 2012 at 9:59 pm
Deep, a bit depressing, and emotional. Good job getting that emotion in writing. You captured it well. Excellent work :) you are a wonderful poet.
 
illusions replied...
Feb. 22, 2012 at 3:18 pm
thank you soooooo much! that means the world to me
 
PoetryAngel14 replied...
Feb. 22, 2012 at 7:45 pm
you're welcome :)
 
staffy said...
Feb. 11, 2012 at 1:57 pm
nice work. the best poetry come from emotion that most people can relate to. nice work.
 
Fm363 said...
Jan. 12, 2012 at 5:27 pm
I love this...
 
SpringMoon98 said...
Dec. 20, 2011 at 3:06 pm
This is a nice poem and it's a little sad but it's meant to be I guess. Overall I like it
 
illusions said...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 2:23 pm
Thank you....!
 
Goddess said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 4:52 pm

beautiful. it reminds me how i am. such pain only meant to be written. great job

 

 
Dreamgirl95 said...
Nov. 17, 2011 at 4:10 pm
This is amazing, and really relatable. Great Job:)
 
petleavitt replied...
Nov. 21, 2011 at 2:43 pm
wow, thank you!!!
 
Risible said...
Nov. 5, 2011 at 3:20 pm
I can really tell that you're writing because you need to. Both your poems have awesome topics and direction, but could be fine tuned. The emotion seems to be breaking out from you on to the page and shapes itself into poetry and it's lovely and you have raw talent and purpose to write, but a little tuning would make it brillant. Thanks so much for sharing. If you get a chance, let me know what you think of writing. :) 
 
petleavitt replied...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 2:51 pm
I will thnx, can you check out some of my new work, plz?!?
 
Risible replied...
Nov. 7, 2011 at 5:00 pm
I'd love to! Is your newer work pending? 
 
petleavitt replied...
Nov. 8, 2011 at 2:22 pm
Ya, and thank you
 
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