Climbing the Tree

October 17, 2011
By RayBaytheDinosaur GOLD, Hampton, South Carolina
RayBaytheDinosaur GOLD, Hampton, South Carolina
18 articles 17 photos 159 comments

Favorite Quote:
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder


Well friend, let me tell you,
My life's been no easy tree to climb.
It's had thorns,
And splinters,
And places where there's nothing to hold on.
Slipping.
But I keep climbing.
Pulling myself up,
One branch at a time,
My eye on the flowers up top.
When I get there this'll all-
Be worth it.
So friend, please listen.
You may loose your footing,
But hold on tight.
Find the strength to hold on
Till you get to the light.
I'm nearing the top,
And the view's just fine,
Though this life's been no easy tree to climb.


The author's comments:
I wrote this for my English class, it was inspired by "The crystal staircase".. or something like that I don't really remember the name

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on Mar. 4 2013 at 5:36 pm
Apollo77 PLATINUM, Brunswick, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"All you have to do is write one true sentence. Write the truest sentence that you know.”
"Madame, all stories, if continued far enough, end in death, and he is no true-story teller who would keep that from you."
-Ernest Hemingway

I like it, really, butI do have a few critiques. first, I don't think 'this'll' is a word. or maybe it is, I don't know. but I like the idea and I thnik you executedit well. one thing I would look at is how much you say and how much you imply. like I would like the metaphor of the tree and life not be stated so much as obviously shown. for me,stating it takes all thefun out of reading the poem, which is a shame because you really are a great poet and I think your poems could be truely fantastic. maybe I'm too picky, but if you made the implication more interesting all your poems would be great.

on Feb. 2 2012 at 11:35 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1401 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

I like it--comparing life's hardships to a difficult task, like climbing a tree. The short lines made it fun to read also~

on Oct. 29 2011 at 1:17 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Favorited!!!!!!

This is incedible! I love how you wrote it, and how you related life to climbing a tree. Well done :)


on Oct. 19 2011 at 6:13 pm
DAN_CER_554 SILVER, Myrtle, Missouri
5 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I get out there and think, 'whatever happens, happens. If i fall, I fall. This is live theater and i am living in it.'"
-Ashley Bouder
New York City Ballet Principal Dancer

i've never really though of life like a tree. I LIKE IT!

Little.Miss said...
on Oct. 19 2011 at 5:13 pm

I like it!!

Keep writing! :)


Acastillo GOLD said...
on Oct. 18 2011 at 8:07 pm
Acastillo GOLD, Phoenix, Arizona
11 articles 0 photos 114 comments

Favorite Quote:
Just because you have flaws, doesn't mean you aren't beautiful ~Zayn Malik

That poem was moving I really enjoyed it a lot. Keep on writing great poetry!

on Oct. 18 2011 at 7:06 pm
Mike6546 SILVER, North Carolina, North Carolina
6 articles 0 photos 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
those who mind don\'t matter and those who matter don\'t mind

this poem is pretty awesome


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