Murder

October 9, 2011
By SophieG. SILVER, St. Davids, Pennsylvania
SophieG. SILVER, St. Davids, Pennsylvania
5 articles 0 photos 47 comments

Woman found dead,
Body ripped apart.
Heart cut from chest
And burned black in the fireplace.

You went calmly to our bedroom,
Cleaned the knife,
Washed your hands.

I didn’t think you were a killer.


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on Dec. 6 2011 at 7:14 pm
shapeshifter56 GOLD, Cave Creek, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"Instead of waiting for the storm to pass, learn to dance in the rain."
--Unknown Author

Holy Cow! Your work is amazing!

on Nov. 14 2011 at 3:25 pm
rainbowgirl BRONZE, Ijamsville, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
My work has been modified to fit your brains. :)

no prob

i am your biggest fan


on Nov. 13 2011 at 1:00 pm
clumsyteardropper SILVER, Roslyn, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"You can't help others, if you yourself need help" -my sister ;) love it!

it's short but says so much... there is a lot of power in so few words ;)  keep this great writing up, girl!
i only have one article posted (i know, lame :P), but I've submitted two more... I'm just waiting for the editors to get back to me.  pretty please check out "Iron Box"!  I'd really appricate it ;)

on Nov. 13 2011 at 12:59 pm
SophieG. SILVER, St. Davids, Pennsylvania
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thanks! :)

on Nov. 13 2011 at 11:02 am
rainbowgirl BRONZE, Ijamsville, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
My work has been modified to fit your brains. :)

i've read all your work, you are a GENIUS! :)

on Nov. 9 2011 at 3:14 pm
Jacy-Lee PLATINUM, Stonington, Connecticut
21 articles 2 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love to learn, learn to love

good job. the simplicity of the majority of the poem really amped up the last line.

on Nov. 7 2011 at 7:15 pm
Dragonfly_Girl PLATINUM, Pleasant Hill, California
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

I love this! It's short and written simply, but it conveys so much! That is very difficult to do, you are talented! If you have a chance, I would love if you could check out my work. Thank you!

on Nov. 7 2011 at 7:05 pm
SophieG. SILVER, St. Davids, Pennsylvania
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Thanks! I read your poem and i loved it so thank you, I am honored that you like mine :) Read my other work please!

FULLSTOP GOLD said...
on Nov. 7 2011 at 3:23 am
FULLSTOP GOLD, Skipton, North Yorkshire, Other
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Favorite Quote:
forever and ever and ever and ever will never be enough

well done, really good poem. i think it leaves the reader completely aware of what has happened. please can you look at my poem, catflap, as my work usually goes unnoticed

Jane3 SILVER said...
on Oct. 31 2011 at 2:58 pm
Jane3 SILVER, Bryn Mawr, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
“The capital-T truth is about life BEFORE death. It is about the real value of a real education, which has almost nothing to do with knowledge, and everything to do with simple awareness; awareness of what is so real and essential, so hidden in plain sight all around us, all the time, that we have to keep reminding ourselves over and over: this is water. This is water.”

Oh, that makes sense, however I feel like that's abusing the commenting. I guess if you can do it subtlety! Haha! Thanks!

greg9381 GOLD said...
on Oct. 30 2011 at 9:47 pm
greg9381 GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
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I like this too :D

She got people to comment by commenting on other people's poems and asking for them to check out her work.


Duckie430 said...
on Oct. 27 2011 at 11:53 am
Duckie430, Riverside, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
“The secret to life is being who you are and being happy with who you are.”
"Whatever does not kill you only makes you stronger."

thank you!

Jane3 SILVER said...
on Oct. 26 2011 at 8:57 pm
Jane3 SILVER, Bryn Mawr, Pennsylvania
8 articles 0 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
“The capital-T truth is about life BEFORE death. It is about the real value of a real education, which has almost nothing to do with knowledge, and everything to do with simple awareness; awareness of what is so real and essential, so hidden in plain sight all around us, all the time, that we have to keep reminding ourselves over and over: this is water. This is water.”

Hi again...still love your work: ) How did you get so many random people to comment?  My work always goes unnoticed

Lexie96 GOLD said...
on Oct. 25 2011 at 6:32 pm
Lexie96 GOLD, Havana, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Now Cinderella don't you go to sleep, it's such a bitter form of refuge, oh don't you know the kingdom's under siege, and everbody needs you. - The Killers

This is interesting, at first I wasn't sure what to say about it, but now going back and reading it again I am struck by the originality of it. I wonder, though, is there a secret message hidden in here? I kind of thought that the heart might stand for love and the death for the loss of it... maybe I'm looking to far into things. Check out my poem if you get the chance? Please

A_____ said...
on Oct. 23 2011 at 11:37 am
A_____, Columbus, Ohio
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Wow!  This is like a murder mystery in 8 lines!  The last line changes the whole perspective.  Great job!

on Oct. 23 2011 at 7:55 am
JamesODalaigh BRONZE, Bandon, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Ever tried. Ever failed. No matter. Try Again. Fail again. Fail better -Samuel Beckett.
Don't be seduced into thinking that that which does not make a profit is without value -Arthur Miller.

i really enjoyed this, it's totally unique and in the good way, keep it up!

glimmer BRONZE said...
on Oct. 18 2011 at 9:27 pm
glimmer BRONZE, Corvallis, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
My favorite quote is one by Albert Einstein-
"Learn from yesterday, Live for today, Hope for tomorrow."

Good job!

When I first started reading, I wasn't sure what I was going to think of it, but then the ending changed the whole thing!

It was short and sweet, which is always nice. It didn't need to be long to get the point across!

Keep writing!!

P.S. Comment on my stuff if you get a chance. Thanks!


on Oct. 18 2011 at 9:18 pm
hippiechick123 GOLD, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
all who wander arent always aimless. where do you go to escape yourself? close your eyes and see me.
all you touch and all you see is all your life will ever be.
i am in love with you <3

creative writing. good job, keep it up! 

on Oct. 18 2011 at 7:52 pm
SophieG. SILVER, St. Davids, Pennsylvania
5 articles 0 photos 47 comments
Hi, thanks for your comment! :) I'll loo at your work! I also have a poem called "Thief", which is the next article from here. Look at that! :)

Duckie430 said...
on Oct. 18 2011 at 4:00 pm
Duckie430, Riverside, Rhode Island
0 articles 0 photos 229 comments

Favorite Quote:
“The secret to life is being who you are and being happy with who you are.”
"Whatever does not kill you only makes you stronger."

Hey, congrats on getting your poem on this site, loved the imagery & suspense. Maybe you can check out some of my work? I'm published anonymously so just advance search for Riverside, RI-I've written over 100 poems, about 80 on this site, one in the magazine, one editor's choice but I'm always looking for more comments & constructive critcism. :) I think you have some talent here so I'd be pleased to hear some feedback.


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