Murder

Holy Cow! Your work is amazing!

no prob

i am your biggest fan

it's short but says so much... there is a lot of power in so few words ;)  keep this great writing up, girl!
i only have one article posted (i know, lame :P), but I've submitted two more... I'm just waiting for the editors to get back to me.  pretty please check out "Iron Box"!  I'd really appricate it ;)

i've read all your work, you are a GENIUS! :)

good job. the simplicity of the majority of the poem really amped up the last line.

I love this! It's short and written simply, but it conveys so much! That is very difficult to do, you are talented! If you have a chance, I would love if you could check out my work. Thank you!

well done, really good poem. i think it leaves the reader completely aware of what has happened. please can you look at my poem, catflap, as my work usually goes unnoticed

Oh, that makes sense, however I feel like that's abusing the commenting. I guess if you can do it subtlety! Haha! Thanks!

Hi again...still love your work: ) How did you get so many random people to comment?  My work always goes unnoticed

This is interesting, at first I wasn't sure what to say about it, but now going back and reading it again I am struck by the originality of it. I wonder, though, is there a secret message hidden in here? I kind of thought that the heart might stand for love and the death for the loss of it... maybe I'm looking to far into things. Check out my poem if you get the chance? Please

Wow!  This is like a murder mystery in 8 lines!  The last line changes the whole perspective.  Great job!

i really enjoyed this, it's totally unique and in the good way, keep it up!

Good job!

When I first started reading, I wasn't sure what I was going to think of it, but then the ending changed the whole thing!

It was short and sweet, which is always nice. It didn't need to be long to get the point across!

Keep writing!!

P.S. Comment on my stuff if you get a chance. Thanks!

creative writing. good job, keep it up! 

Hey, congrats on getting your poem on this site, loved the imagery & suspense. Maybe you can check out some of my work? I'm published anonymously so just advance search for Riverside, RI-I've written over 100 poems, about 80 on this site, one in the magazine, one editor's choice but I'm always looking for more comments & constructive critcism. :) I think you have some talent here so I'd be pleased to hear some feedback.