October 9, 2011
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I could taste them.
I could taste the rage, the agony, the hatred.
I could taste the love of a mother, slowly leaving me…
One small drop at a time.

And it drove me crazy, as I took a step
Cars racing past me, no one would have time to think
I would be ‘that girl’,
The girl who couldn’t take it
The girl who ended it

But as I began to take the last step
Head pounding now
Mind dull
They stopped me

As much as I wanted to believe that it was over
As much as I wanted to believe that I couldn’t feel,
That I couldn’t live
They proved I could

I was drowning now,
But I managed to escape
The taste of my tears
Bringing me back to reality.

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justme242 said...
Jul. 16, 2012 at 10:18 am

Great job it was very good 


WonderWoman98 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 16, 2012 at 9:48 am
They way you made the reader be able to feel how much pain the character was in was amazing. it was amazing.
DanielM said...
Jul. 16, 2012 at 9:44 am
Wow that was really good. I really like your emotions. I especially like the line I tasted my own agony. Very good use of imagery and emotion. Suggestion: I would more imagery .
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