October 9, 2011
By aislingob BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
aislingob BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Love as long as you live, and laugh as much as you breathe."

I could taste them.
I could taste the rage, the agony, the hatred.
I could taste the love of a mother, slowly leaving me…
One small drop at a time.

And it drove me crazy, as I took a step
Cars racing past me, no one would have time to think
I would be ‘that girl’,
The girl who couldn’t take it
The girl who ended it

But as I began to take the last step
Head pounding now
Mind dull
They stopped me

As much as I wanted to believe that it was over
As much as I wanted to believe that I couldn’t feel,
That I couldn’t live
They proved I could

I was drowning now,
But I managed to escape
The taste of my tears
Bringing me back to reality.

The author's comments:
This piece is a piece based partly on my own emotions, and partly my emotions taken to a whole other level.

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justme242 GOLD said...
on Jul. 16 2012 at 10:18 am
justme242 GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
help will be given to those who ask for it.

Great job it was very good 


on Jul. 16 2012 at 9:48 am
mynameisobel PLATINUM, Collingswood, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
You can not be brave if only good things have happened to you.

They way you made the reader be able to feel how much pain the character was in was amazing. it was amazing.

DanielM SILVER said...
on Jul. 16 2012 at 9:44 am
DanielM SILVER, Kent, Washington
6 articles 1 photo 247 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I would rather hated million times for what i did then loved a million times for what i didn't do." - Daniel Moto
" I've sought out to be the best i could posibly be but when i hit a roadblock in life what did i do, i had two choices either stay at the roadblock or i take this roadblock and make of it and go around it and achieve my goal. So, what will it be?"- Daniel Mathia

"People take love like its a four letter word or just a phrase that you tell people or your friends all the time. But in reality love is much bigger than a merely phrase or 4 letter word. Instead love is a genuine promise or covenant to that special person."-Daniel Mathia

“Why change yourself when you were made perfect and wonderfully by the creator of everything?” – Daniel Mathia

“If live is not hurtin then were really not living in.” – B. Reith

Wow that was really good. I really like your emotions. I especially like the line I tasted my own agony. Very good use of imagery and emotion. Suggestion: I would more imagery .

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