Lucy.

September 25, 2011
By savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.


I had a dear friend once,
Her name was Lucy.

She wasn’t a best friend,
She was a sister
In all but blood.

We went through life together
Never far apart.
And although we both had husbands
We were the halves of a heart.

But Lucy, she had problems
Couldn’t connect with people
Stayed in the house.

But not with me,
I cared for her
Til our hair turned gray.

She wasn’t invisible to me
I comforted her after each sneer and laugh.
I knew she believed me,
But she also believed them.

Her family had left her,
Gone on from this world
Now she only had me.

I tried to visit her.
She was lonely
Stuck inside her head.

But I had friends,
I had children,
I had a life beyond her.

She could sense it
And she didn’t blame me.

So one day she went for a walk.
Left a note saying
“Going to the park”

But when I went there
She wasn’t.
I searched for her
And finally found her

At the top of a building
The fifth floor.
I called to her, “Lucy!”
She smiled saying she’d waited for me
To say goodbye

I had lived this life with her,
And knew all her pain.
I knew if I asked her to
She would stay here with me.

That was why I couldn’t.
She’d tried all those years
Did everything I said, every exercise
All of it
Just to be normal.

It didn’t work.

She smiled and waved goodbye,
Hugged my frozen limbs
And stepped up to the edge.

I couldn’t live without her.

I cried, “Wait!”
Let me come with you
Let me hold your hand
Let me be your friend
To the bottom of the building
To the very end.

“But, you have so much to live for,” she said,
“Why waste it for me?”

“Because there has never been a you,
There has never been a me.
We are part of each other
One and the same.”

So I held her hand
Kissed her cheek
Said, “I love you,
My only sister.”

And we stepped off together
Like we’d always done before
Air whistled past
Then it all went
Black.

I woke in a hospital
Saw my family at the bed
The nurse said I was lucky
I’d recover in a few months

I asked, “Where’s Lucy?”
“Lucy?” the nurse asked.
“The girl who jumped with me!”

My family was bewildered
“Who was Lucy?” they asked.
The nurse looked at me,
“Sweetie, you’re in the Mental Institute.

There is no Lucy.”

And then I realized
I knew who Lucy was
She was

Me.


The author's comments:
This was inspired by a dream I had.

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on Dec. 26 2011 at 4:25 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

Thank you so much Annette! :)

Annette11 GOLD said...
on Dec. 26 2011 at 4:07 pm
Annette11 GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Oh my gosh, WOW thank your for pointing this out to me it was absolutely AWESOME! The beginning reminded me of a book titled Snowflower and the Secret Fan (I think). But I did not predict the ending at all. FANTASTIC WORK!

pinkowl BRONZE said...
on Nov. 25 2011 at 11:35 pm
pinkowl BRONZE, Tyrone, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Jeremiah 29:11

hahaa, i do get all excited! i was most school spirit in high school! I JUST CAN'T CONTAIN MYSELF! oh man, i have to read this again! <3

on Nov. 25 2011 at 11:04 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

I think this is one of my favorite comments!  You're so enthusiastic, LOL XD

pinkowl BRONZE said...
on Nov. 25 2011 at 10:49 pm
pinkowl BRONZE, Tyrone, Pennsylvania
3 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
Jeremiah 29:11

OH MY GOODNESS. THIS IS AMAZING. HOLY COW. i couldn't stop reading it. honesly at the end, i had the chills. you are an amazing writer, and this is prob. my favorite poem i've found on teenink! i love the unexpected ending! wowowow, amazing, fab, fantastic!

leafy said...
on Oct. 8 2011 at 3:30 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Yah totally XD

on Oct. 8 2011 at 3:22 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

I know right?  The least important of all of them is the only one that consistantly shows up...

leafy said...
on Oct. 8 2011 at 3:18 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

I don't know, but the should, and its also weird how the VIP tag shows up in the forum, but not the magazine one, it's kinda annoying...

on Oct. 8 2011 at 3:09 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

I just posted a thread about something I noticed with the badges.  If you get VIP or a magazine article, the badges show up next to your username.  But not if you get Editor's Choice.  I've curious about that for a while, just never really thought to ask until now.  Why is that?

leafy said...
on Oct. 8 2011 at 3:07 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Lol me too XD

on Oct. 8 2011 at 2:53 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

Thanks leafy! ^_^ <~ I like that face :D

leafy said...
on Oct. 8 2011 at 2:48 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Nce job! I agree with raven, it is unexpected, and that's what makes this poem so good. Keep up the great work! ^_^

on Oct. 8 2011 at 12:35 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

I suppose I should be flattered for having surprised you!  :D  It was unexpected to me as well when I wrote it, as unusual as that might seem.  And thank you for your kind compliments!  I was so excited to get the editor's choice award at first I couldn't believe that I had won it!  Ironic, seeing how I was playfully teasing you about your overabundance checkmarks just a few days ago.  But thanks again! :)

on Oct. 8 2011 at 10:11 am
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1634 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

This was, actually, totally unexpected, and I delight in the unexpected, so I found this fascinating, in a weird kind of way. Wow, I don't really know what to say! You put it together well, and the simple language made it almost a little frightening when the end came near.

But another part of me thought that it didn't have to be so frightening, as much as deeply emotional. I have a habit of dubbing things as 'scary' whenever out-of-the-ordinary emotions are involved. Whatever it was, I liked it for its profound unexpectedness.

A thousand cheers for Liz's editor's choice award!


on Oct. 7 2011 at 7:08 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

I'm so glad that you liked it!  Yah this poem was really crazy when I wrote it.

on Oct. 7 2011 at 6:18 pm
Destinee BRONZE, Oakville, Other
3 articles 0 photos 306 comments

Favorite Quote:
Blegh. - Abraham Lincoln

OMG. I so did not expect that! I was like, "Dude, don't kill yourself!" 

And then it turned out Lucy is her? Ahh! I love it!

on Oct. 7 2011 at 6:05 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

Thank you!  I know right?  I was so excited.  I was like, I have a checkmark!!!! :D  It's my first one, and it was so cool!  Hey, Stargirl, just call me Liz, it's what all the Teeninkers nicknamed me.

on Oct. 7 2011 at 4:42 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Incredible!!!! This gave me shivers, Planet!

Congrats on your editors' choice!!!

 





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