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I had a dear friend once,
Her name was Lucy.

She wasn’t a best friend,
She was a sister
In all but blood.

We went through life together
Never far apart.
And although we both had husbands
We were the halves of a heart.

But Lucy, she had problems
Couldn’t connect with people
Stayed in the house.

But not with me,
I cared for her
Til our hair turned gray.

She wasn’t invisible to me
I comforted her after each sneer and laugh.
I knew she believed me,
But she also believed them.

Her family had left her,
Gone on from this world
Now she only had me.

I tried to visit her.
She was lonely
Stuck inside her head.

But I had friends,
I had children,
I had a life beyond her.

She could sense it
And she didn’t blame me.

So one day she went for a walk.
Left a note saying
“Going to the park”

But when I went there
She wasn’t.
I searched for her
And finally found her

At the top of a building
The fifth floor.
I called to her, “Lucy!”
She smiled saying she’d waited for me
To say goodbye

I had lived this life with her,
And knew all her pain.
I knew if I asked her to
She would stay here with me.

That was why I couldn’t.
She’d tried all those years
Did everything I said, every exercise
All of it
Just to be normal.

It didn’t work.

She smiled and waved goodbye,
Hugged my frozen limbs
And stepped up to the edge.

I couldn’t live without her.

I cried, “Wait!”
Let me come with you
Let me hold your hand
Let me be your friend
To the bottom of the building
To the very end.

“But, you have so much to live for,” she said,
“Why waste it for me?”

“Because there has never been a you,
There has never been a me.
We are part of each other
One and the same.”

So I held her hand
Kissed her cheek
Said, “I love you,
My only sister.”

And we stepped off together
Like we’d always done before
Air whistled past
Then it all went
Black.

I woke in a hospital
Saw my family at the bed
The nurse said I was lucky
I’d recover in a few months

I asked, “Where’s Lucy?”
“Lucy?” the nurse asked.
“The girl who jumped with me!”

My family was bewildered
“Who was Lucy?” they asked.
The nurse looked at me,
“Sweetie, you’re in the Mental Institute.

There is no Lucy.”

And then I realized
I knew who Lucy was
She was

Me.





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Annette11 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 26, 2011 at 4:07 pm
Oh my gosh, WOW thank your for pointing this out to me it was absolutely AWESOME! The beginning reminded me of a book titled Snowflower and the Secret Fan (I think). But I did not predict the ending at all. FANTASTIC WORK!
 
savetheplanet replied...
Dec. 26, 2011 at 4:25 pm
Thank you so much Annette! :)
 
pinkowl said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 10:49 pm
OH MY GOODNESS. THIS IS AMAZING. HOLY COW. i couldn't stop reading it. honesly at the end, i had the chills. you are an amazing writer, and this is prob. my favorite poem i've found on teenink! i love the unexpected ending! wowowow, amazing, fab, fantastic!
 
savetheplanet replied...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 11:04 pm
I think this is one of my favorite comments!  You're so enthusiastic, LOL XD
 
pinkowl replied...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 11:35 pm
hahaa, i do get all excited! i was most school spirit in high school! I JUST CAN'T CONTAIN MYSELF! oh man, i have to read this again! <3
 
leafyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 2:48 pm
Nce job! I agree with raven, it is unexpected, and that's what makes this poem so good. Keep up the great work! ^_^
 
savetheplanet replied...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 2:53 pm
Thanks leafy! ^_^ <~ I like that face :D
 
leafyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 3:07 pm
Lol me too XD
 
savetheplanet replied...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 3:09 pm
I just posted a thread about something I noticed with the badges.  If you get VIP or a magazine article, the badges show up next to your username.  But not if you get Editor's Choice.  I've curious about that for a while, just never really thought to ask until now.  Why is that?
 
leafyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 3:18 pm
I don't know, but the should, and its also weird how the VIP tag shows up in the forum, but not the magazine one, it's kinda annoying...
 
savetheplanet replied...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 3:22 pm
I know right?  The least important of all of them is the only one that consistantly shows up...
 
leafyThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 3:30 pm
Yah totally XD
 
Thesilentraven This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 10:11 am

This was, actually, totally unexpected, and I delight in the unexpected, so I found this fascinating, in a weird kind of way. Wow, I don't really know what to say! You put it together well, and the simple language made it almost a little frightening when the end came near.

But another part of me thought that it didn't have to be so frightening, as much as deeply emotional. I have a habit of dubbing things as 'scary' whenever out-of-the-ordinary emotions are involved. Whatever it was, I... (more »)

 
savetheplanet replied...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 12:35 pm
I suppose I should be flattered for having surprised you!  :D  It was unexpected to me as well when I wrote it, as unusual as that might seem.  And thank you for your kind compliments!  I was so excited to get the editor's choice award at first I couldn't believe that I had won it!  Ironic, seeing how I was playfully teasing you about your overabundance checkmarks just a few days ago.  But thanks again! :)
 
Destinee This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 7, 2011 at 6:18 pm
OMG. I so did not expect that! I was like, "Dude, don't kill yourself!" 

And then it turned out Lucy is her? Ahh! I love it!
 
savetheplanet replied...
Oct. 7, 2011 at 7:08 pm
I'm so glad that you liked it!  Yah this poem was really crazy when I wrote it.
 
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Oct. 7, 2011 at 4:42 pm

Incredible!!!! This gave me shivers, Planet!

Congrats on your editors' choice!!!

 

 
savetheplanet replied...
Oct. 7, 2011 at 6:05 pm
Thank you!  I know right?  I was so excited.  I was like, I have a checkmark!!!! :D  It's my first one, and it was so cool!  Hey, Stargirl, just call me Liz, it's what all the Teeninkers nicknamed me.
 
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