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Her words linger in the air
Lined with red lipstick
Shards of a broken mirror
Pieces of herself
Reflecting the untold truth
No one will listen
No one knows
How much she wishes
Maybe things were different
She is the infamous head cheerleader
Blonde hair
In perfect pigtails
Blue eyes
Have seen to many nasty words
A living stereotype
A puppet
Controlled
By the unbreakable strings
Of conformity
A mask
To play the part
Perfectly
Unaware
No one dares forget her
Yet she fades
Easily into the back round
Every day surrounded by friends
Only to realize
She is alone
Her tears
Stain her flawless skin with black streaks
From the eyeliner she will still put on
Every morning
She will play the part
Perfectly.



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Josika.Nav said...
Jun. 19, 2012 at 2:52 am:
hey! very well written. i really like the language and phrasing. i think you should work on your punctuation as they help the reader to read as well as interpret the poem. but on the whole : great work and keep writing :D
 
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milforce said...
Oct. 31, 2011 at 8:56 pm:
I really like this. It's cool how you looked at this girl kind of critically and you have nice word choice. You also have some really cool phrases in there such as "controlled by unbreakable strings". Great job!
 
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Randomosity said...
Oct. 23, 2011 at 9:28 pm:
i love this poem its amazing
 
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sunny.all.day. said...
Oct. 6, 2011 at 7:22 pm:

I agree with the others, the flow is a bit choppy at parts, such as "a puppet/ controlled", also, when you wrote " perfect pigtails" it kind of changed the tone a bit for me, because personally, I think the word pigtails is a bit.. immature? atleast for this piece. 

 

Could you please check my poem 21st Century or Tower of Nothing? thanks :)

 
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Kvothe28 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 5, 2011 at 4:54 pm:
I thought this was pretty deep. The people who you think hold it together the best have problems too. I read your thread, if you have time, would you please read He Went Out With His Boots On (Ch.1) it's posted anonymously. Thank you
 
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ButterflyKiss said...
Oct. 5, 2011 at 2:57 pm:

"A living stereotype, a puppet controlled by the unbreakable strings of conformity."

 

That was my favorite part. I wil admit, I find it hard to read your poem because of the lack of punctuations and the choppy poem structure, but the poem itself is wonderful. 4/5! :D

 
andromeda13This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Oct. 5, 2011 at 3:05 pm :
Thanks! This is my first poem I've written, but I will prob write more. 
 
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