Captured By Reflections

August 25, 2011
By livelovesmile GOLD, Gaithersburg, Maryland
livelovesmile GOLD, Gaithersburg, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
I am like a star burst. A juicy contradiction. I'm hard to figure out, but when you get to my center, your suprised! It's not what you thought it would be, huh.


Nameless: each one hopeless. Coldly whispering: “To tall, to short. To fat, to skinny. To pale, to flushed.” So steady yet so rushed. Each the same, but still so different. Alone, yet you know judging eyes are watching, pressuring. Disappointed in themselves, disgusting. Rethinking their status, rethinking themselves. Soul wrenching. They try to escape, but they can’t. Surrounded. Trapped. In a house of mirrors.


The author's comments:
In life we often let others judge us to the point where we stop listening to ourselves, and they become our mirrors. Each person is unique in their own way, that's what makes the world beautiful.

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on Nov. 19 2011 at 9:36 pm
InfiniteRain BRONZE, Steinbach, Other
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Very Deep, I love it :)

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on Oct. 31 2011 at 12:31 pm
fdbfdsf, Bangalore, Other
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really beautifully written. the concept in itself is so unique. well done. one suggestion would be to use 'too' instead of 'to' because that's grammatically incorrect. but i still love it. could you check out my work, tell me what you think and rate? id really appreciate it

on Sep. 6 2011 at 8:49 pm
livelovesmile GOLD, Gaithersburg, Maryland
19 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am like a star burst. A juicy contradiction. I'm hard to figure out, but when you get to my center, your suprised! It's not what you thought it would be, huh.

thank you!(:

on Sep. 1 2011 at 9:57 pm
xximjustmexx PLATINUM, Oak Forest, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
There's no god. There's no religion. There's only life, what you do with YOUR life, who YOU let affect YOUR life. Bad things happen to everyone, you just have to learn to deal with them.

amazing 5/5

elfishy said...
on Sep. 1 2011 at 4:19 pm
it was really deep :) it wasnt very long but it said a lot.

on Aug. 31 2011 at 8:48 pm
i think this would be a  lot better if you put this in the free verse style, and not sentences. very good, tho! :)

jojo said...
on Aug. 31 2011 at 5:34 pm
It's really nice!!!

on Aug. 30 2011 at 2:17 pm
livelovesmile GOLD, Gaithersburg, Maryland
19 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am like a star burst. A juicy contradiction. I'm hard to figure out, but when you get to my center, your suprised! It's not what you thought it would be, huh.

Thank you so much I really appreciate the feedback!

 


on Aug. 30 2011 at 8:12 am
BeLoveToday PLATINUM, Manchester, New Hampshire
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Favorite Quote:
And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same.
-Nelson Mandela

"Leave your fear of love behind,
let your dreaming be your guide.
If you seek, than you shall find."
-"Dreamer," by Elizaveta

I really like that you chose to format this piece in a prose poem, because the message is conveyed more directly and vividly. Sometimes, when we try to use a rhyme scheme to express a certain idea, the words just sound forced and don't flow. Free verse, especially prose poems are great because you can use sound techniques like internal rhyme (Too pale, too flushed. So steady, yet so rushed) and others to generate emotions in the reader WITHOUT following a specific pattern. Great job, and keep writing!

on Aug. 29 2011 at 8:22 pm
InTheSpiritOfRain, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I like writing"

I agree. We can't please everybody.




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