watching cars

August 14, 2011
By secrets_of_silence GOLD, Gisborne, Other
secrets_of_silence GOLD, Gisborne, Other
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Favorite Quote:
life had i loved the more
had it but passed away
as quietly as the day
ebbs from the darkening star.


-emanuel litvinoff


I’m writing on my legs to hide the scars
Sitting down I’m only watching cars
Yellow red blue green
Normalcy just makes me scream

What happened to my happy smile?
I’m fake happy now for a while
Waiting for my life to fade
All happiness is our charade

Flower petals
Ripped to shreds
Symbolizing
My regrets


The author's comments:
<free to cry
Not free to breathe>
wrote this a while ago hope you like it

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on Oct. 31 2011 at 8:40 pm
secrets_of_silence GOLD, Gisborne, Other
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Favorite Quote:
life had i loved the more
had it but passed away
as quietly as the day
ebbs from the darkening star.


-emanuel litvinoff

yeah i guess it could be but it doesnt feel like it to me

on Sep. 9 2011 at 6:02 pm
sunny.all.day. GOLD, Potomac, Maryland
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"If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day so I never have to live without you."
— A.A. Milne (Winnie-the-Pooh)
"writing is a struggle against silence" carlos fuentos
You miss 100% of the shots you don't take."

There are only one or two teeny tiny errors, but I like the idea :) Except the transition from writing on legs to watching cars is kind of awkard? 

on Aug. 30 2011 at 7:58 pm
secrets_of_silence GOLD, Gisborne, Other
12 articles 0 photos 439 comments

Favorite Quote:
life had i loved the more
had it but passed away
as quietly as the day
ebbs from the darkening star.


-emanuel litvinoff

i know! i was being honest!!

on Aug. 30 2011 at 7:57 pm
Destinee BRONZE, Oakville, Other
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Blegh. - Abraham Lincoln

Haha, as if there's anything to disapprove of. :)

on Aug. 30 2011 at 7:56 pm
secrets_of_silence GOLD, Gisborne, Other
12 articles 0 photos 439 comments

Favorite Quote:
life had i loved the more
had it but passed away
as quietly as the day
ebbs from the darkening star.


-emanuel litvinoff

it was funny becouse my friend gave me a jacket to wear couse he read it and thought our leader would dissaprove

on Aug. 30 2011 at 7:54 pm
Destinee BRONZE, Oakville, Other
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Blegh. - Abraham Lincoln

Wow. That's actually really interesting. :) 

on Aug. 30 2011 at 7:54 pm
secrets_of_silence GOLD, Gisborne, Other
12 articles 0 photos 439 comments

Favorite Quote:
life had i loved the more
had it but passed away
as quietly as the day
ebbs from the darkening star.


-emanuel litvinoff

i wasnt sure about the last stanza. and it was funny becouse i actually wrote this on my arm while sitting on the front steps at church, waiting for my youth group to start

on Aug. 30 2011 at 7:42 pm
Destinee BRONZE, Oakville, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Blegh. - Abraham Lincoln

This is so sad. :( I like how the last stanza is shorter than the rest.

on Aug. 24 2011 at 6:15 pm
secrets_of_silence GOLD, Gisborne, Other
12 articles 0 photos 439 comments

Favorite Quote:
life had i loved the more
had it but passed away
as quietly as the day
ebbs from the darkening star.


-emanuel litvinoff

thanx   

on Aug. 23 2011 at 7:36 pm
casielynnxoxo SILVER, Pasadena, Maryland
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"You'll never fully understand someone, unless you are them."

I like the message it sends, this is good. It flows nicely too.  Good job :)


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