Secrets

August 16, 2011
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Will you keep my secret inside?
Or whisper to the passing tide?
And reveal it to all who maybe care
Perhaps, better, in truth, not to dare
To risk, and them with this burden trust
It is not more noble than to rust,
Expose the labyrinths of your soul

But you still may say, this is not so,
Your soul is no iron can
Then how, do tell, to span
This chasm of questions, doubts,
If every other person shouts
In order not to hear
The secrets which you share

I speak, and you listen, enthralled
None to find out the reason you called
Out in your dreams, rebirthed with desire
To tell them the words and feed the fire
In the secrets of their hearts
Which might exist
Will you keep my secret inside?





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yazigirl said...
Mar. 13, 2012 at 4:51 pm

very good, touches deep in the soul of what a secret means

 

 
Miranda_K. said...
Mar. 8, 2012 at 8:21 am
I absolutly love that this poem makes you wonder. It's wonderfully worded, and the ryhme scheme is great. Fantastic job
 
Blue4indigo replied...
Mar. 8, 2012 at 2:35 pm
Thank you! :)
 
CarolinaBoy23 said...
Oct. 1, 2011 at 10:56 am
Wow. This is...amazing. i love it.
 
Blue4 replied...
Oct. 1, 2011 at 3:00 pm
Thank you! I'm really glad that you do.
 
Anonymous_7 said...
Aug. 29, 2011 at 9:17 pm
hey, I love this! Very creative! Could you please check out my work and comment?
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 30, 2011 at 8:30 am
Thank you very much. I looked at your page and there's nothing there?  :(
 
Kenniekonglee said...
Aug. 26, 2011 at 10:48 pm
excellente! whoa~ deep... i sense ur much more older than me ~ xP
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 27, 2011 at 12:01 pm
Thanks, and no, I'm probably not that much older than you- I'm a sophomore. :)
 
Kenniekonglee replied...
Aug. 28, 2011 at 9:39 am
So ur like ... In college? I'm juz in secondary skul... L:
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 28, 2011 at 1:19 pm
No! High school! :)
 
Danealle said...
Aug. 22, 2011 at 6:59 pm
very well written! I like the dark taste you get from this.
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 23, 2011 at 9:53 am
Thank you!
 
consumedbygrace247 said...
Aug. 22, 2011 at 12:06 pm
Wonderful, I love the rhyme
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 22, 2011 at 12:36 pm
Thank you!
 
Katiesetsfires said...
Aug. 20, 2011 at 12:44 pm
<333333
 
PoppyHasAHeart said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 9:48 pm
The rhyme really makes this poem unique, and the words that form it really make the reader think! overall, you managed to not reveal the specific message throughout the whole poem, and the topic is totally relatable. great work! :)
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 18, 2011 at 8:08 am
Thank you! (Your first sentence rhymes,! was that intended?) I'm getting really curious, what message did you see in the poem? (Just wondering whether it was the one I intended).
 
PoppyHasAHeart replied...
Aug. 18, 2011 at 11:55 am
haha nope, not intended. :) well, I think that in the beginning the character was trying to figure out whether to tell someone something and then as it goes on, I think the character is saying that it would benefit others if they didn't know. I think the character is speaking to someone who he thinks will tell her secret, hence "Will you keep my secret inside?" So, that's my interpretation, and if it's not what you had intended to portray, it's okay because everyone sees and reads things differe... (more »)
 
Blue4 replied...
Aug. 18, 2011 at 9:43 pm
I'll read your new story; tomorrow, though (too tired). Everybody obviously has their own interpretation, but I am wondering if you can see mine... I had thought that the speaker is the muse, inspiration (whatever that makes us write), and is asking the person whether he/she will write, ie, keep the secrtet inside, or not... Makes sense?
 
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