I Loved You Like the Autumn

August 9, 2011
By savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.


I love the dusky autumn
Wreathed in gold and red
Just like an old crush I had
Handsome while I bled

First glance, the trees don’t seem like much
But on a closer look
I saw the kindness in the branches
The cover’s only the front of the book

I wandered through the forest
Hour through hour, day after day
Hoping for the trust to confide the secret
Of the heart of the forest, to show me the way

The trees were not cruel
They showed me the wonders of the forest
But into the heart I was not allowed
Forbidden! the trees sang in chorus

So when I saw the white wolf hunting
I sank with despair
I saw to my horror as she went
Into the heart of the forest to her lair

I let the fallen leaves bury me
Let them choke my sobs
This was how the animals found me
Fulfilling their friendly jobs

At last the leaves fell
And the trees lost their glory
I tried to forget in winter nights
Tried to lose myself in someone else’s story

Stupid as I was
I went down to the bare trees
Turned right back around
And waded back through the leaves

My heart tried not to shatter
My mind tried to forget
That I had seen the white wolf standing next
To the tree I once met

And although I’ve lost my love for them
And ignore the beauty in the trees
When I think back to that autumn
My heart races with the bees


The author's comments:
He was my best friend, now I don't know what we are anymore. I wrote this poem because my stupidity made me lose that friendship, made him hurt me. I still think of him sometimes.

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on Jan. 7 2013 at 9:06 pm
In_Love_with_Writing GOLD, Easton, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"I can do all things through Christ who strengthens me." Phillipians 4:13

Really beautiful. Nice work! Also can you comment and rate some of my work?

TaleGate GOLD said...
on Aug. 15 2011 at 12:46 pm
TaleGate GOLD, Clackamas, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"If you want the rainbow, you must put up with the rain."

You're welcome a bunch! :D haha And thank you! :D Ahhh I love writing. And I love reading brilliant writing. :)

on Aug. 14 2011 at 11:35 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

I vote for Liz :D Being a bard can be my acomplishment not my name!

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Aug. 14 2011 at 5:14 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

I vote for Liz. Simple. :)

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Aug. 14 2011 at 5:14 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

First of all, I like Hazel and Lorax, they sounds like real names, like my username is a real name(although it's not my name) but I don't really think they fit you. I don't think bard fits you because that is usually referred to an old man so I vote for Liz. It's short and sweet and convenient and it fits you because it is you. 

on Aug. 14 2011 at 1:28 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

1 - Bard   0 - Liz

on Aug. 14 2011 at 1:27 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

I agree, I this is the best poem I've written so far.  I wanted to write a poem that wasn't so literal in it's meaning.

on Aug. 14 2011 at 10:19 am
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Putting a confident hand in the air, my vote is 'Bard.'

on Aug. 13 2011 at 8:53 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

LOL I actually like the whole bard idea just icosahedron was too long.  I like it, makes me feel like Shakespeare.  Ok a vote, Liz or Bard?

on Aug. 13 2011 at 7:44 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1635 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

Yeah, what about what Stargirl said-- except Bard, for short?

on Aug. 13 2011 at 7:42 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1635 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

The language in this is really the prettiest of all of your writing, I thought. And the story it tells is so real, that one knows you wrote it with artistic honesty. The power of the words themselves as well as the symbolic motifs almost erase the traces of awkward wording, which is a really good thing. Because it is the content that counts, of course. Well done!

on Aug. 13 2011 at 6:30 pm
Thesilentraven PLATINUM, Mableton, Georgia
40 articles 2 photos 1635 comments

Favorite Quote:
"il piu nell' uno," (according to Emerson, an Italian expression for beauty)

"Unable are the loved to die, for love is immortality" ~Emily Dickinson

"The deeper that sorrow carves into your being, the more joy you can contain"
~Kahlil Gibran

I was thinking of the kimya dawson song 'Tireswing.' (He says, shuffling his feet sheepishly).

on Aug. 13 2011 at 5:20 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

I do, but they are based upon my real name which I would rather not post on the internet.  The two names that Raven came up with that I sorta liked were Hazel and Lorax.  Can you draw upon that?

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Aug. 13 2011 at 5:06 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Do you have any nicknames at home, in the real word...etc that we could draw inspiration from? 

on Aug. 13 2011 at 4:39 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

DEFINITELY NOT.

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Aug. 13 2011 at 3:55 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

Izzywiz? 

on Aug. 13 2011 at 2:22 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

LOL but no.

Aderes47 GOLD said...
on Aug. 13 2011 at 2:09 pm
Aderes47 GOLD, Cambridge, Massachusetts
11 articles 0 photos 897 comments

Favorite Quote:
You will find as you look back upon your life that the moments when you have truly lived are the moments when you have done things in the spirit of love.
Henry Drummond

What about treehugger? 

(It goes along with your username)


on Aug. 13 2011 at 1:14 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

I like it when people can relate, it just adds to the poem as a whole.

on Aug. 13 2011 at 1:14 pm
savetheplanet PLATINUM, Anaheim, California
45 articles 9 photos 565 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all.

Thanks a bunch! :D  I really like your poems too.


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