between sins

August 6, 2011
By claudiathewho SILVER, West Tisbury, Massachusetts
claudiathewho SILVER, West Tisbury, Massachusetts
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between sins
I am

the white
skeleton of a home

before the walls
are erected; while I'm

waiting I
kiss translucent and

weightless
as plastic wrap;

the pillow is
under my head

before between
my legs; between sins I am

zero breath;
not even the blue

of the horizon, but
whatever color nothing

is
at midnight; I am

between sins a star,
combing waves for their

single sound;
between sins
I am

music decomposing
to the form of purity, a

point

.



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on Aug. 13 2011 at 4:43 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Thank you, I appreciate it. Thanks for catching that redundant phrase... funny how many people looked at the story before you, and you're the first who noticed. :)

on Aug. 13 2011 at 3:54 pm
claudiathewho SILVER, West Tisbury, Massachusetts
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Haha, yep, I commented on one of your stories. :)

on Aug. 13 2011 at 3:16 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

poor you! ps. are you done procrastinating?:) sorry, don't mean to pester you...

on Aug. 13 2011 at 2:00 pm
claudiathewho SILVER, West Tisbury, Massachusetts
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I once submitted a poem with a lot of complicated spacing. The formatting got messed up so much that no one would've been able to understand it, so I took it off the site. It was horrendous, haha.

on Aug. 13 2011 at 1:02 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Haha! Good idea. Luckily, the worst that I suffered was a whole blob of words instead of a real story with paragraphs. MUCH worse when this happens with poems.

on Aug. 13 2011 at 12:28 pm
claudiathewho SILVER, West Tisbury, Massachusetts
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It really is! I guess I should send my specially formatted poems in by snail mail, so the editors can see what the poem is supposed to look like.

on Aug. 13 2011 at 12:17 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Okay :) Isn't it such a nuisance when TeenInk messes up formatting?

on Aug. 13 2011 at 10:52 am
claudiathewho SILVER, West Tisbury, Massachusetts
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Thank you! Originally the poem had line spacing in it, but Teen Ink made everything left margin. I'll definitely read some of your work when I get the chance. (Which actually means that I'll read it when I stop procrastinating on reading it.) 

on Aug. 13 2011 at 9:50 am
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
24 articles 0 photos 382 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be sorry for something that I did than for something I didn't do.
-Red Scott

Good job, your poem was unique and ambiguous. There were some lines that were simply golden:) A litttle choppy, though. Can you please read some of my work, rate and comment? I'd appreciate it. (Esp. the two, or three poems, if the third one is online already)


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