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I walk alone.
Everyone has gone
and left me.
When will my time also come?

I pass my old home,
remember the cracked leather
of the sofa
and the way my cockier spaniel
used to curl up at my feet.

Everywhere,
the colors I cannot
take my eyes away from
for they are painful reminders
of my previous life

I walk past the plowed fields
the empty corn stands shivering
and the ghost flowers not rule
the forgotten domain

I stand here
feel the turning earth
below me,
I realize
my time has come.

I was alone.
I walked alone.
while I raise my wings
and take off into the night,
I silently say goodbye.



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starbuxcoffee said...
Aug. 21, 2011 at 2:30 pm
This is really awesome, great use of imagery. I loved it! :)
 
emilybwrites replied...
Aug. 21, 2011 at 8:57 pm
thanks:) i really apreciate your comment
 
TotheSea said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 4:44 pm
I loved the images - "ghost flowers" and "plowed fields" and "cracked leather."
 
Sunny123 said...
Aug. 16, 2011 at 12:10 am
This is amazing work! I love the emotion you have put into it. Keep it up :)
 
DreamingOurWorld said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 10:06 am
It's really nice. To me, it's about someone who's going to die, and they're saying goodbye to everything they used to know.
 
FaithSnyder16 said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 4:39 pm
This is something VERY heartfelt! I love when writers put thier raw emotions into their work, it gives great insite into the people they are. I really really love this poem, it not only shows pain that you or your character has endured, but it also shows the happy times you / they remember from a long time ago, and that it's time to let things go, it's so beautiful and people can relate! Thanks for sharing and letting me read it! :D
 
emilybwrites replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 5:18 pm
thank you so much for your feedback! i really appreciate it!
 
_Zavery_This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 4:07 pm
You grasped me from the first sentence, great job! =D
 
emilybwrites replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 6:15 pm
thank you so much! this really means a lot to me!!!
 
fictionnutt96 said...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 9:11 am
This is amazing! It's like you could see the house as you were writing this. Good job!
 
emilybwrites replied...
Aug. 14, 2011 at 6:15 pm
thank you so so so much!
 
Timekeeper This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 13, 2011 at 10:41 am
Wow, this was really emotional! It felt like a ghost's perspective and that was really unique and engaging as a reader.
 
Timekeeper This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 25, 2011 at 3:59 pm
I just read this again, and my opinions from before still stand: this is excellent!
 
kypanda said...
Aug. 12, 2011 at 8:59 pm
I really love your title. You were obviously pictureing this very well; good description. Thanks for sharing.
 
Muh-ree-uh said...
Aug. 12, 2011 at 8:46 pm

Wow!!!  Great poem!!! It is very much a deep poem, and you can get a feel for the person walking through the "forgotten domain".  Your imagery is fantastic!  Something you can do in the future is even bring in your other senses like the sense of smell and how the air tastes... 

This poem is very well written!! :) If you could, please check a poem of mine and give me your opinion... It's called "Shall I compare our love to an ocean?"

 
BetsyL said...
Aug. 12, 2011 at 4:05 pm
Great imagery Emily... very beautiful!  Keep writing!
 
Pretty Polly said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 11:58 am
I loved the poem "I Walk Alone"....haunting feeling there!  You've got great stuff in you....keep it up.
 
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