Teasing the Tempest

August 1, 2011
Custom User Avatar
More by this author
Slap, slap, slap
The sound of my feet
Against the asphalt.

Thump, thump, thump
The sound of my heart
Within my chest.

Flap, flap, flap
The sound of my face
Jiggling up and down
At every step.

I’m a bullet,

A lightning bolt,

An arrow
From a hunting bow.
I’m as fast as the wind.


I’m faster.
I cause leaves to swirl,

Trees to sway.
I pop your ears
As I pass.

I’m faster than a falcon

Quicker than a wink.
I can outrun a wildfire

Outrun a plague –
But am I fast enough to catch it?

It’s harder to overtake

Than to simply not be overtaken.
And boy, do I have the white stag!
Sprinting football player
35 meter head start.
I don’t play football
But I can run.

I’m not in shape,

Haven’t been in a year.
I don’t know how to play football

Just run where I’m pointed.
I don’t play any sports
But I can run.

I leap forward

Legs pumping,

Arms at right angles,

Hands open,

Fingers tight together.

I pass everyone
Leaving them spinning on one leg

Like the cartoons.
Merric will be caught –
How could he outrun the wind?

I’m gaining on him –
At 2 meters a step

Not even a hard core athlete
Can keep up with me.

The wind rushes in my ears.
I can’t hear anything,

But I can see.
I can see him reaching the “endzone”

(or whatever it’s called).
I put on more speed
But would it be enough?

He’s 5 feet away.
I’m 15.
He’s at the endzone –
I leap . . .
And fly over his head.
He had collapsed
Right after the finish line.
I lost.
I’m not faster than the wind
Life ain’t no Disney show.
The original stories

By Hans Christian Anderson
Are more accurate.

But that’s not the point.

It doesn’t matter

It’s not about the end.
Forgive my cliché, optimistic, Disney-likeness;
But it’s about the journey.

Mine was meaningful.
My pride was pruned,

My dignity dashed,

My ego eradicated.
It’s all fun.
Winning doesn’t matter.


You can’t possibly expect me

To gain 10 feet

On a sprinting football player.
This is life,
Not an inspirational movie.

Join the Discussion

This article has 11 comments. Post your own now!

FashionThief said...
Aug. 25, 2012 at 3:55 pm
Its alright, I like that you used big words.
Kiki_McGee said...
Aug. 3, 2012 at 12:41 am
I like this! I love the end when it switches to a more light-hearted feel and explains that the journey you took was far more important than winning. The only thing that confused me was the random question marks, but from reading the previous comments I think that I understand.
JerseyGirl716 said...
Aug. 4, 2011 at 7:32 pm
I usually dislike onomatopoeia in poetry, I'm of the opinion that if you're setting out to write a poem you should be able to describe the sound without it, but it works here. Love the message, love the whole thing! Awesome! 5/5 :)
Brandon O. said...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 8:55 pm
This time someone (probably the same person) gave it a 1!! Expain why, at least!
Eirias said...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 3:09 pm
What is wrong with this? Why did someone give this a 3?
JoPepper replied...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 5:04 pm
Nothing's wrong with it, but something's wrong with them!!! I really liked it!!!!! Keep writing!!!!!!! :D
Eirias replied...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 6:46 pm
Again, thank you! It's always nice to have fans.
JoPepper replied...
Aug. 4, 2011 at 5:27 pm
You're more than welcome!!!!!!:))
TwasBrilling said...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 7:24 pm
'Outrun a plauge, but am I fast enough to catch it?' Oh, I simly love that.  The only part I didn't like was the word Disney-likeness.. I think it sort of didn't go with the mood. Other than that, I really like this.
Eirias replied...
Aug. 2, 2011 at 9:06 pm
Thanks! the stanzas didn't break where I wantedt them to, and I have a random question mark floating around.
flawless200This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 10:47 am
I love it! It shows feeling which the world needs a lot of right now. Good job!!
bRealTime banner ad on the left side
Site Feedback