Why? 2-25-2011

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Why so tired?
Why so mad?
Why do I keep trying?
Why do I wish for what I can't have?

Why violets?
Why roses?
Neither of them mean anything.
Neither of them care.
Neither of them do anything.
They just sit there.

Why the same?
Why not different?
Why depressed?
Why not optimistic?

Why am I here?
Why are you there?
I don't know how to end this.
I guess it ends here.





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PrincessBubblegum said...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 5:08 pm
I agree with IamtheshyStargirl
 
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Aug. 29, 2011 at 5:59 pm
This is a very good first poem, well done.
 
HIPPIEatHEART_writerINsoul This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 9:50 am

Seeing as it's your first poem, it's quite good.

The only thing I'd comment on negatively is that some of the rhymes seem a bit forced.

Other than that, I really like the meaning and the last two lines.

 
EnigmaticBeing replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 1:35 pm
Thanks for the critique. It was a bit forced because when I first started wiriting I thought that a poem sounded bad if it didn't rhyme. Unfortunately because of that the poem lost some of its integrity but I figured I would post it anyways to see what people thought. So thanks again for letting me know :)
 
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