Twisted Prayer

July 21, 2011
By pill.happy.adventure PLATINUM, Manchester, New Hampshire
pill.happy.adventure PLATINUM, Manchester, New Hampshire
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Now I lay me
down to sleep.
I wait of the demons
to creep,
from out of the closet
and under the bed.
Coming from all the dark corners
inside my head.
Their bloody fangs
and ripping claws,
they lay me open
and expose my flaws.
Far away from the light,
and away from the sun.
Trapped in a place
where there’s nowhere to run.
All through the night,
alone with my fears.
Drowning from the
weight of my tears.
With no one to pray too.
And no soul to take.
I sleep with the demons,
until the time that I wake.



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on Dec. 15 2011 at 12:15 pm
Kparker27 PLATINUM, Groesbeck, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"In the end, it's still best to wait for the one we want rather than settle for what's available. It's still best to wait for the one you love rather than to settle for the one who's around. It's still best to wait for the right person, because life's too short to waste on the wrong one."

wow very different...though I like how you twisted it. 

on Oct. 17 2011 at 2:48 pm
RayBaytheDinosaur GOLD, Hampton, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder

Yow! After the first two lines, that changed alot lol xD it was really good though, I love weird and unusual morbid poems like that!

leafy said...
on Aug. 31 2011 at 9:30 am
leafy, City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Again, another excellent poem. I some areas it didn't flow very well, but other than that, great job!

wasps said...
on Aug. 22 2011 at 3:27 pm
wasps, Other
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.Stars Stars Stars.

on Aug. 5 2011 at 11:44 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

boy or girl? i like the darkness yopur poems have it's weird but the way u describe it makes it beautiful

on Aug. 5 2011 at 8:01 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

Whoah!

This was awesome I love the morbid , dark aspect to it. Absolutely amazing !

You rhymed it well too!


Shadow878 GOLD said...
on Jul. 29 2011 at 9:13 am
Shadow878 GOLD, Marion, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"I tell you the truth, unless you change and become like little children, you will never enter the kingdom of heaven." Matthew 18:3

"Do not pray for easy lives, pray to be stronger men." JFK

“Science without religion is lame, religion without science is blind.”Albert Einstein

"I believe in Christianity as I believe that the sun has risen: not only because I see it, but because by it I see everything else."
C. S. Lewis

"A young man who wishes to remain a sound atheist cannot be too careful of his reading."
C. S. Lewis

"Anyone who doesn’t believe in miracles is not a realist."
David Ben-Gurion

"An eye for an eye makes the world go blind" Gandi

prettey good(am I'm a tough critic) I'm trying to find out what the demons are a methphor for lol

on Jul. 27 2011 at 1:38 am
pill.happy.adventure PLATINUM, Manchester, New Hampshire
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:D thank you so much!!!

on Jul. 26 2011 at 10:21 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

OKAY THIS IS AMAZING! I absolutely loved this poem! This is going on favorites! Do you see me? *clicks on favorites* Really and truly awesome job! I love the rhythm, rhyme scheme, word choice, and entire feel of the poem! This is completely awesome! Keep up the amazing work!


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