Name in lights

July 14, 2011
By pill.happy.adventure PLATINUM, Manchester, New Hampshire
pill.happy.adventure PLATINUM, Manchester, New Hampshire
21 articles 3 photos 41 comments

My entire life I been told what to and who to be
But now I think its time for me to just be me
As I look in the mirror I don’t know who I am
Tell me, when did my life became such a sham
I should have cleaned up my life a long time ago
Up until now I never understood when people said “get your chickens in a row.”
Instead of sticking with you and being looked down on with shame,
I’m gunna go out there and make something of my name
So you sit here, smoke, drink, whatever just waist your life away
But I can’t do this anymore my life isn’t some game
When I die I want my name in lights
I wanna die knowing I lived the right life



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on Dec. 12 2011 at 9:09 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Dang it! my comment didn't post.

 

Oh well. I like this alot. It is good and has a strong, important message. My only advice is that you use question marks when you write a question. I know that free verse writers arn't fond of punctuation, but it makes it easier to understand.

 

 

 

 

Now this isn't really cc, but I'm a know it all perfectionest who cant keep her mouth shut(that's where the Loud in LoudDreamer comes from): The sayings are "Get all your ducks in a row." and "Don't count your chickens before they hatch." It is a little interesting to hear them blended together.......


on Aug. 5 2011 at 11:50 pm
musicispassion PLATINUM, Perris, California
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Favorite Quote:
" Life is never easy for those who dream."
There are so many other quotes i need pages to write them

great and inspiring poem i always say ur going to regret the things you;ve said to me one day,wasit should be waste other than that brilliant ! :P

on Aug. 5 2011 at 8:14 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

I LOVE this. I think you made it very real and relatable. My only critiscism is that waist should be waste.

 

great job :)


on Jul. 28 2011 at 11:49 am
I really like this.... a lot! Mainly because I can relate to it strongly. You pin pointed just how it feels to want to be something. :)

on Jul. 23 2011 at 5:18 pm
TheHangingGirl BRONZE, Winter Haven, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"Poets utter great and wise things that they themselves can not comprehend."

Took my breath away. Wow.

on Jul. 21 2011 at 7:29 am
pill.happy.adventure PLATINUM, Manchester, New Hampshire
21 articles 3 photos 41 comments
Thank you! Some people said when i posted it on the forum "its spelt shame." i was like "No the words sham." im so glad someone knows the word! :)

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on Jul. 20 2011 at 8:32 pm
Kai17 GOLD, Spokane, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
*beepbeep*
"Where to, Miss?"
"To the stars."

I like this for multiple reasons, so forgive my for not saying them all. =)

You might be the only person I've heard use the term 'sham' and make it sound good. Just fyi.



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