Name in lights

July 14, 2011
My entire life I been told what to and who to be
But now I think its time for me to just be me
As I look in the mirror I don’t know who I am
Tell me, when did my life became such a sham
I should have cleaned up my life a long time ago
Up until now I never understood when people said “get your chickens in a row.”
Instead of sticking with you and being looked down on with shame,
I’m gunna go out there and make something of my name
So you sit here, smoke, drink, whatever just waist your life away
But I can’t do this anymore my life isn’t some game
When I die I want my name in lights
I wanna die knowing I lived the right life





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LoudDreamer said...
Dec. 12, 2011 at 9:09 pm

Dang it! my comment didn't post.

 

Oh well. I like this alot. It is good and has a strong, important message. My only advice is that you use question marks when you write a question. I know that free verse writers arn't fond of punctuation, but it makes it easier to understand.

 

 

 

 

Now this isn't really cc, but I'm a know it all perfectionest who cant keep her mouth shut(that's where the Loud in LoudDreame... (more »)

 
musicispassion said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 11:50 pm
great and inspiring poem i always say ur going to regret the things you;ve said to me one day,wasit should be waste other than that brilliant ! :P
 
Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 8:14 pm

I LOVE this. I think you made it very real and relatable. My only critiscism is that waist should be waste.

 

great job :)

 
DreamsAreBroken said...
Jul. 28, 2011 at 11:49 am
I really like this.... a lot! Mainly because I can relate to it strongly. You pin pointed just how it feels to want to be something. :)
 
hanging_girl_666 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 23, 2011 at 5:18 pm
Took my breath away. Wow.
 
Robyn97 said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 8:32 pm

I like this for multiple reasons, so forgive my for not saying them all. =)

You might be the only person I've heard use the term 'sham' and make it sound good. Just fyi.

 
LoveOnHerArms replied...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 7:29 am
Thank you! Some people said when i posted it on the forum "its spelt shame." i was like "No the words sham." im so glad someone knows the word! :)
 
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