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Pebbles

I want to get lost
Just to fight my way back
To you
To prove
I know
I should have made the walk
Sometime, just so you could hear the pebbles on your window
Again.
But I didn't
Just to make sure
To you
To prove
I am
Not him, and never will be.





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musicispassion said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 12:42 am
what is this about i really enjoyed this
 
Zildj This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 12:47 am
I'd rather know what *you* think it is about :)
 
musicispassion replied...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 12:59 am
honestly i don't know i have an idea but then i don't
 
BrightBurningCampeador This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 2:29 pm
This poem is great, but the 7th line seems too long compared to the rest of the poem. Maybe you could break it into "Sometime/just so you could hear/the pebbles/on your window"
 
Robyn97 said...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 12:32 pm
The sentence breaks made a nice touch. Good job!
 
ritabelle511 said...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 10:18 am
I agree, I thought your quote was quite funny :)  I really enjoyed the poem, as well - at first the line breaks threw me off, but I think they work well within the poem.  Overall, reallly nice job!
 
thetruthawaits94 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 10:39 am
hahaha I love your quote! I literally laughed out loud! As for your poem, i really like it. It's interesting, in a good way. Great job!
 
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