July 18, 2011
since the beginning
I've wanted to change it all
since the beginning
I've walked down this hall
ever white
ever unchanging
i cant fight it
i must go with the flow
rough waters
challenge my sleep
and my sanity
take a deep
calming breath
and try not to think
about possible death
think about
ever present
ever unchanging
possible positives

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RoseMonster said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 9:41 pm
Hey, this was good. I really liked the smooth transition from line to line, especially the "go with the flow/ rough waters/ challenge my sleep" part. It's nice, with very distinct images but a little abstractness/room for personal variation, which I like in poetry. Keep writing, and if you feel like it, check out my work.
brynnibooo said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 6:46 pm
This is good! The only thing i would change is "ever unchanging".... I think that using "ever" and "unchanging" together is awkward. You could use "Ever white, never changing" and keep the same syntax. do you mind checking out my poems? I would really appreciate it! -Keep Writing! 
GreenActress said...
Oct. 17, 2011 at 5:00 pm
Great poem! I hope you keep writing, I look forward to reading more! Check out some of my new poems and other works?
thefamoustapper said...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 10:10 pm
Love it! Keep writing all of ur poems are fantastic!
chrissie_star replied...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 2:25 pm
LAngel13 said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 8:25 pm
I love it and totally feel ya, but theirs kind of a question mark on it ya feel me? like it's bomb but i kinda didn't get it til i read you personal comment thingy on da side.
chrissie_star replied...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 10:06 am
well yeah i get it but it has many different meanings like... you can view it as a window to the future to look ahead to see whats coming or you can look at it as like a person whos like in their past and all they want to do is change then they see the light at the end of the tunnel...
LAngel13 replied...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 3:27 pm
ohhh ok I gotts iit(X
chrissie_star replied...
Jul. 21, 2011 at 3:55 pm
 yeahh lol xP
dark.poet said...
Jul. 19, 2011 at 2:11 pm

This is beautiful. I could relate. I see it as like a deep struggle to change but the things that hold you down are the things you have to break free of to see the possibilities. and hey, it'd be awesome if you checked out my poem, it's kind of like this one. Keep writing !


I LIKE PIE said...
Jul. 19, 2011 at 12:22 pm
sorry... the whole poem didn't get through... oh well. 
I LIKE PIE said...
Jul. 19, 2011 at 12:21 pm

Here is a poem!

The poem poem;

It takes smarts, and it takes time,to come up with a rhythm, to think of a rhyme.oem!

I LIKE PIE said...
Jul. 19, 2011 at 12:18 pm

Is this a poem about free will? It sure seems like it... Any way, I love it. 

p.s. I wish I could be a member of teen ink, but I am only 12. I'm posting my poems on commenst in order to share them. Take that!

chrissie_star replied...
Jul. 19, 2011 at 2:06 pm
basically it is but i dunno i just wrote it
Goodguy1200 said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 5:56 pm
I like this haha. Its pretty good, it made me think on some of the things in my past too. p.s. if its not too much trouble, i was wondering if you could look at one of my pieces. Its a poem called "A Loss for Words"
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