Time On A Road That Never Ends

July 13, 2011
Time of the abondoned.
Silence, your best friend.
Caught on a lonely road that never ends.
Moon guides you with mysterious glow.
Night loneliness clogs what you know.
Quiet surroundings has thought.
Mother Nature, a wonder, a beauty that can't be bought.
Reality sinks.
Time to breath.
Time to think.
Calm breathes cleanse everything.
Coldness, body shivering.
Moon drops.
Feeling stops.
Environment changes within each second like a top.
Sun rises, so new, so bright.
Warmth, light and new sight.
Now can you see the end of the road.

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dinesh vs said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 10:24 am
wonderful poem i like it
zone7494 said...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 7:18 pm
I really like this poem you did a good job on it I wrote a poem and I'd appreciate it if you'd take a look at it and tell me what you think here's the link: TeenInk.com/poetry/sonnet/article/349224/Addicted/
msoccerm345 said...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 2:51 pm
i really liked this poem because it reminds me of what i have been going through.. i couldnt see the end of the road earlier this year.. i was drenched in sadness and lost without anywhere to go.. im still on the road but i can definately see the end of all this feeling of sadness and the begining of ag reat future. this is an amazing poem. definatley one of my favorites.
vzimmerman replied...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 1:12 pm
Thank you so much for the comment. Sorry I haven't been on in since I posted my pieces actually. I am glad you can connect with it and it really hits your heart. That is my main goals, and I am happy to hear I accomplished it. :) So thanks again! 
Echinacea8 said...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 10:13 am
Normally I don't like rhyming poems, but the way you presented it created a very haunting impression which fitted the topic perfectly. By that I suppose I am trying to say is by not having complete sentences and a recognizable pattern it help convey how raw this particular time of day is. I hope that makes sense! Keep writing!!
vzimmerman replied...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 1:15 pm
WOW! Never have I seen someone comment on my different non-recognizable pattern. I am glad to hear that you liked it and it fits the poem. I thank you for that unique comment though. I will now think of how the rhyming pattern will come into play in future poems. Thank you! That helped so much:) 
ElleNicole said...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 11:45 pm

I enjoyed this. Nice work!

Check out my poem? Thanks if you do. =)

vzimmerman replied...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 1:16 pm
Thanks for the comment! I will check out your work!
booklover04 said...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 10:12 pm

nice flow, emotion, and rhythm :)

can you check out my poem and give me some feedback? thanks.

vzimmerman replied...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 1:17 pm
Those 3 words you commented actually went a long way. So thank you. And I will check out your work. :)
Anagam said...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 9:13 pm
wish i could see the end of ther road... i will, not yet though. your poems is really insightful
Midnight_Poetry14 said...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 4:14 pm
Beautiful. :)
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