Lost In This War

July 8, 2011
By SamsStory SILVER, Brewster, Massachusetts
SamsStory SILVER, Brewster, Massachusetts
7 articles 1 photo 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Sometimes life doesn't go as planned but that's okay because then we would get bored with everything and who knows maybe something bad could bloom into something amazing.

I sit between the war
I'm tired of it all
The crying
The yelling
The hurt
I pull my feet up to my cheast
trying to hide the pain
But all I hear are the screams
She's crying. I cant take it!
I want to go to the happy place Everyone talks about
I have been so close just to have It yanked away
Now I cower In my thoughts
I want my friends back
And my family
But I cant I'm lost
Lost in this war

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on Nov. 23 2011 at 8:57 pm
Jellybeann BRONZE, La Jolla, California
1 article 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never regret something that made you smile :)
Yesterday was histroy, tommorow is a mystery and today is a gift, that's why its called present.
I love you <3
Your face makes you pretty, your body makes you sexy, but your personality makes you beautiful

Love this poem, but again, grammar, punctuation, spelling, etc... i think needs a little work but can be easily fixed. I also would add some rhyming to it to make it more catchy and memorable, it appeals to the eye more and is more attractive, for me. Good work and keep it up! :)


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