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Magestic emperor

Glimmering colors in the sky,
Aquamarine locked in his eye,
His rainbow joins a jolly green,
The majestic creature strides with beam,
With a secret so brilliant,
Delicate shimmies, Oh so radiant,
Dazzling gems in its eye,
Gazing up in the sky,
With its stunning quills
So exquisite as treasure,
A vibrant shawl hiding pleasure,
Beyond this quilt…
Is a Peacock built



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In_Love_with_Writing said...
Jan. 16, 2013 at 3:47 pm
Oooh pretty description! Nice job! Can you comment and rate some of my stories?
 
so_joy said...
Sept. 27, 2012 at 8:51 pm
Wow! I like this a lot! Great job! Please read, rate, and comment on my poems! Thanks!
 
Sarri2014 said...
Mar. 17, 2012 at 10:39 pm
Your word choice is so good and you paint such a wonderful picture. I love the title as well. For me that's the hardest part, how to really grab a reader with the title, and you nailed it. Check my poems out too!
 
XpurplemacaroniX said...
Sept. 19, 2011 at 5:07 pm

excellent! fantistic use of imagery and descriptive words, this is just such a pretty poem and it flows so well :)

i hate to sound like a total user by using your poem to ask for feedback on my own work, but will you please cheack out my poem Imagination, and maybe some of my other stuff too?? i would so appreciate feedback from you, and anybody else :)

 
callie15 said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 8:00 pm
Wonderful. I could see it quite well, and it was lovely. Great job :)
 
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Aug. 29, 2011 at 6:06 pm
Lovely, very imaginative and graphic. 
 
Lola_Black said...
Aug. 6, 2011 at 2:32 pm
Sweet! It's so beautiful!
 
ohheyyyelli said...
Aug. 4, 2011 at 12:16 pm
Beautiful imagery!
 
purplequeen said...
Aug. 4, 2011 at 8:08 am
Thanks isabelled12
 
isabelleD12 said...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 2:17 pm
Wow! This is unbelievable! Great work!
 
purplequeen said...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 2:16 pm
Thank You so Much! I checked out your poems and they are amazing!
 
HeidiJoy12 said...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 1:29 pm

The imagery in this is beautiful. I love it.

You should check out my poems too.

 
purplequeen said...
Jul. 31, 2011 at 3:25 pm
Thank so much! Teenink isa great way to experience writing so come join and write!!
 
lele27 said...
Jul. 31, 2011 at 3:24 pm
I really enjoyed this. You are a good writer. Great job taking such experience and using it to spark creativity.
 
kypanda said...
Jul. 31, 2011 at 10:42 am
You have tons of description about color...it really presents a vivid image. I can picture what you're talking about so well. Thank you for sharing.
 
purplequeen replied...
Jul. 31, 2011 at 3:21 pm
Thank You so Much!
 
EnigmaticBeing said...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 11:11 am
Another beautiful poem but I think it would be better without the last line. I think it throws off the poem's rhythm.
 
purplequeen replied...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 12:26 pm
Thank You!
 
purplequeen said...
Jul. 25, 2011 at 10:56 am
Do you like this poem??
 
Laura_Oliver said...
Jul. 16, 2011 at 3:45 pm

somebody likes birds!

You seem like someone with a really good way with words--check out my poem, 'True Colors', and leave some feedback for me!

 
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