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Visions

All I see is the
image
of you and me
holding hands
holding me
till I saw
you and her
holding hands
holding her





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Ha-5-rika said...
Aug. 6, 2011 at 10:54 am
Are your heartbreak poems based on past relationships? 'Cause they are amazing?
 
musicispassion replied...
Aug. 6, 2011 at 2:21 pm
the heart break one isn't but this ine and vines isn't about a relatonship i've never been in one but it's true about the other poems
 
OfTheUnknown said...
Jul. 10, 2011 at 1:02 pm
oommmgggg once again I see how this involves youu-knoww-whooo lol fantastic! :)
 
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 10, 2011 at 1:04 pm
thanks clever screen ane miss you
 
qui133 said...
Jul. 9, 2011 at 12:32 pm
the image of two people holding hands always makes makes me think of a trap closing down...love can become a beautiful cage.
 
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 9, 2011 at 12:39 pm
ya u r like a fortune cookie thanks
 
qui133 replied...
Jul. 10, 2011 at 11:39 am
and on that note, your lucky numbers ar 1,5,7,3,54, and 9. live, laugh, don't bet money, and check out some of my work if you ever get the chance. ;)
 
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 10, 2011 at 1:07 pm
haha ok i'll check
 
CarrieAnn13 said...
Jul. 7, 2011 at 11:02 pm
Aw, this is sad.  It's like your other poem, 'Vines'.  I'm guessing you recently suffered a break-up?  If so, my heart goes out to you.
 
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 7, 2011 at 11:06 pm
actually i've never had a boyfriend this and my other love poems are based off a looong story
 
Alon_Freevoice said...
Jul. 6, 2011 at 4:28 am
few words but "aw!"
 
CrossMyHeartAndHopeToLie replied...
Jul. 6, 2011 at 10:05 am
Really cute. Sad but sweet at the same time. I love it. But try not to let your words be so choppy and use some punctuation where there should be pauses. Other than that AMAZING
 
ArgonElement replied...
Jul. 6, 2011 at 11:05 am
Short and unbelievably sweet.
 
musicispassion replied...
Jul. 6, 2011 at 7:16 pm
awww thanks everyone I;m sorry about punctuation but I don't worry about it in my poetry. In all other aspects of writing I do.
 
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