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I smell damp grass and sticky bodies and
Hard pellets of rain sting my body.
I step into the tent but I find that
It is not a sanctuary after all.
You all look at me without
Really looking, glancing but then
Deeming me unworthy of your
Esteemed company;
My cheeks flush, and I feel no larger than
A single blade of grass.
You sit in chairs in your expensive clothes
And talk about things that don’t really matter
With people who will never really matter
As I stand on the edge, not receiving a single
Hello.
Glance, look away. Glance, look away.
I’m just part of the scenery, with my
Flawed complexion
And my body that isn’t long and lean
And my hair that doesn’t stay straight in the rain.
I am just another girl who isn’t
Worth your time to know.
I glance at the dewy lawn, and I see
One lonely blade of grass,
Bent and broken.
A sad sort of smile touches my lips.
I close my eyes and smell the rain.



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Vicky11 said...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 11:13 am:
We have all been there thats for sure, and I love the blad of grass imagery :) good work
 
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akrreid said...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 7:11 pm:
I was really touched by your poem. I had experiences just like this and can really relate. Five stars!
 
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Cryswithaly said...
Jul. 28, 2011 at 7:55 pm:
LOVED IT!! Favorited<3
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 11:34 am :
Wow - thank you so much!
 
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msn9896 said...
Jul. 28, 2011 at 6:59 pm:
I really like the structure :)
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 11:33 am :
Thank you!
 
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ohmakemeover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 11:54 pm:
This poem really reminded me of how I write my own poetry!  I like how you weren't afraid to portray yourslef as imperfect and you weren't afraid to tell us about those not great experiences.  You really opened up with this poem, I like it a lot.
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 11:33 am :
Thank you!  There is a definite similarity between our work in this poem.
 
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ZildjianThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 11:53 pm:
The ending makes it all worth it! Its a lot like James Joyce, how you take a roadblock as an opportunity to look up and around instead of down.
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 11:32 am :
Well, thank you very much!
 
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.Izzy. said...
Jul. 24, 2011 at 8:48 pm:
Touching. I know how that feels. Amazing use of imagery! I like it
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 10:01 pm :
Thanks very much!
 
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Hazel-daisy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 24, 2011 at 6:37 pm:
i really like this and its really well written, a lot of people don't think rain smells, i think it does! :)
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 10:00 pm :
Thanks! And the rain does indeed have a smell - I actually love the smell of rain :)
 
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Bgeek24This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 24, 2011 at 6:26 pm:
I like this. It was almost as if I was there. Good job
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 9:57 pm :
Thank you!
 
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samiasaskia24 said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 6:02 pm:
Thank you for sharing, I have been in a situation similar! Very nicely written!
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 9:54 pm :
Haha haven't we all? :) Thanks!
 
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ohheyyyelli said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 5:35 pm:
This is so good! You have an amazing writing talent. Very relatable, too. Good work[:
 
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 9:53 pm :
Thank you very much :)
 
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