A Response

June 7, 2011
By DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
7 articles 6 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death


I told myself I’d write a poem
the right way
so that everyone could understand it,
including myself.
No more theories,
abstractions,
or questions of existence.
Just something enjoyable,
Amusing.
Because isn’t that what we’re here for?
To have fun.
I’m having fun
believe me,
I am.
Truly.
Sort of.


The author's comments:
This is the poem sparked after reading a certain type of poem found all over Teen Ink, a kind that a ton of people love. Except me. So I tried writing one to see what it felt like, but it ended up still being in my style. Whoops.

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on Jan. 12 2012 at 3:13 pm
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
7 articles 6 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

Haha thanks man!

on Jan. 12 2012 at 2:43 am
Wildflower30 SILVER, Kolkata, Other
8 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
Create your own sayings, for only then do they make sense most. ---- Me

Aced it, dude!

on Dec. 28 2011 at 8:41 pm
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
7 articles 6 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

Haha wow, thank you so much! And yes, regarding frustration, thats MORE than true haha I just wrote what I think is one of my best pieces ever purely out of frustratiion. Thanks for your time and comment!

on Dec. 28 2011 at 8:39 pm
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
7 articles 6 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

Haha thank you very much! Glad you've had the same thoughts!

on Dec. 28 2011 at 8:36 pm
Pamplemousse SILVER, Gilbert, Arizona
7 articles 1 photo 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To be happy, Don't do whatever you like, Like whatever you do" -James Barrie (author of Peter Pan)

I know exactly how you feel! sometimes its just so much more fun to write abstract stuff and question life and make a mockery of things! I love all your stuff though, keep up the good work. :)

on Aug. 15 2011 at 9:21 pm
ohheyyyelli SILVER, Woonsocket, Rhode Island
5 articles 3 photos 178 comments

So true/relatable.

You know, there are quite a few poems that have been published that I don't like at all, and so many that I love and are barely recognized.
Writing can be frustrating. And in the end, you need to write as yourself, for yourself.(: great work


on Aug. 14 2011 at 9:38 pm
silver_ice BRONZE, Wheelock, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 24 comments

Favorite Quote:
Imagination is the eye of the soul.
-Joseph Joubert
and
Clothes make the man. Naked people have little or no influence on society.
-Mark Twain ;P

this is great! this is the kind of poem tht makes me smile... honesty is the core of poetry so even though this work is simple i love it!! :)

on Aug. 6 2011 at 11:00 pm
consumedbygrace247 BRONZE, Durham, North Carolina
4 articles 2 photos 55 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Change the way people think, and things will never be the same." -Steve Biko (South African civil rights martyr)

I can relate to writing out of frustration. Some of my best poems come out of frustration. Also, I find that when I try certain styles or types of poems they always turn into me and my style because after all,whatever I write is me. So, this is you, and I loved it. Differently different and spectacular.

on Jul. 29 2011 at 11:18 am
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
7 articles 6 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

Thank you, and the inspiration came mostly out of frustration so I just, wrote down what I was thinking haha

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on Jul. 28 2011 at 5:28 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

i like this poem a lot, its just your thoughts kinda put out there, and the rythm was good too. and i also agree, i like the end with the "sort of". keep up the good work! 5/5

on Jul. 23 2011 at 9:37 pm
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
7 articles 6 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

Thanks, Im gald you relate to it!

on Jul. 23 2011 at 5:27 pm
TheHangingGirl BRONZE, Winter Haven, Florida
1 article 1 photo 250 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Poets utter great and wise things that they themselves can not comprehend."

' Sort Of.'

I love twist like that because i say that stuff all the time. My parents will be like," You okay?" and I'd say," Yes im a happy girl with amazing parents straight As a good school a lot of friends." and then when the walk out of the room Id say," If only."


on Jul. 22 2011 at 10:01 pm
DeusExMachina SILVER, Reading, Pennsylvania
7 articles 6 photos 93 comments

Favorite Quote:
The universe was exploding, each particle away from the next, hurtling us into dark and lonely space, eternally tearing us away from each other--child out of the womb, friend away from friend, moving from each other, each through his own pathway toward the goal-box of solitary death

haha glad someone feels the same way! thanks!

on Jul. 22 2011 at 4:45 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

haha. I know. I always wind up writing poems with weird personifications or descriptions that are of course really very easy for me to understand, but not as easy to others. I read ALL of these poems about relationships and/or dark thoughts, and everyone loves them! I wish i could write something like that, but i always wind up writing MY style. But don't worry! That's a good thing. IT"S YOU! I really liked this poem a lot! `"" thumbs up, up, up! :)

on Jul. 1 2011 at 9:25 pm
Alice_in_Wonderland GOLD, San Clemente, California
16 articles 0 photos 620 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I could give up, I could stay stuck, or I could move on, So I put one foot front of the other, No no no nothing’s gonna break my stride, “ –David Archuleta (The Other Side of Down)

Good job! I really like this poem! 5 out of 5 stars! Keep it up! :)


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