The Fear Monster

May 22, 2011
By JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin


It clutches me heart in an icy hand,
Someone is dragging a white hot knife through my throat,
My lungs are on fire,
My blood is frozen in my veins,
Beads of sweat run down my neck and forehead,
My hair sticks to my neck,
A sword is threatening to drop on me,
Someone is sticking pins all over me like I’m a voodoo doll,
Walls are closing in on me,
Telling me I’m trapped,
I can’t go anywhere,
Yes this is fear.


The author's comments:
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on Oct. 1 2011 at 7:54 am
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

alrighty :D

Steph0804 GOLD said...
on Sep. 30 2011 at 9:12 pm
Steph0804 GOLD, Seoul, Other
12 articles 4 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Explaining a joke is like dissecting a frog: you understand it better, but the frog dies in the process." -E.B. White

Um... probably "Peanut Butter Kisses"

on Sep. 30 2011 at 4:57 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

Thank you so much!!!! Anything of yours you'd like me to read? :D

Steph0804 GOLD said...
on Sep. 25 2011 at 12:33 pm
Steph0804 GOLD, Seoul, Other
12 articles 4 photos 206 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Explaining a joke is like dissecting a frog: you understand it better, but the frog dies in the process." -E.B. White

Wow! This is really powerful, it describes fear perfectly! Just fix the mistake ritabelle511 pointed out, and this poem is absolutely thrilling!

on Jun. 22 2011 at 12:11 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

Whoops sorry:O  Thank you for commenting and reading I'm glad you liked it!!!!! :D

austenite GOLD said...
on Jun. 22 2011 at 10:00 am
austenite GOLD, River Falls, Wisconsin
13 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
...one word from you will silence me forever. If, however, your feelings have changed, I will have to tell you: you have bewitched me, body and soul, and I love....I love...I love you. I never wish to be parted from you from this day on. -Mr. Darcy

Wow, this is intense! All the imagery and descriptors you used really put me in the same position as the speaker of the poem! The only thing I saw that could be changed was "It clutches me heart in an icy hand" - did you mean "my heart?" Great job!




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