The Fear Monster

May 22, 2011
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It clutches me heart in an icy hand,
Someone is dragging a white hot knife through my throat,
My lungs are on fire,
My blood is frozen in my veins,
Beads of sweat run down my neck and forehead,
My hair sticks to my neck,
A sword is threatening to drop on me,
Someone is sticking pins all over me like I’m a voodoo doll,
Walls are closing in on me,
Telling me I’m trapped,
I can’t go anywhere,
Yes this is fear.

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Steph0804 said...
Sept. 25, 2011 at 12:33 pm
Wow! This is really powerful, it describes fear perfectly! Just fix the mistake ritabelle511 pointed out, and this poem is absolutely thrilling!
JoPepper replied...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 4:57 pm
Thank you so much!!!! Anything of yours you'd like me to read? :D
Steph0804 replied...
Sept. 30, 2011 at 9:12 pm
Um... probably "Peanut Butter Kisses"
JoPepper replied...
Oct. 1, 2011 at 7:54 am
alrighty :D
ritabelle511This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 10:00 am
Wow, this is intense! All the imagery and descriptors you used really put me in the same position as the speaker of the poem! The only thing I saw that could be changed was "It clutches me heart in an icy hand" - did you mean "my heart?" Great job!
JoPepper replied...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 12:11 pm
Whoops sorry:O  Thank you for commenting and reading I'm glad you liked it!!!!! :D
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