Betrayed

May 20, 2011
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I know what you are thinking
I see it in your face
I see frustration glaring
Disdain you can’t erase

I know its all my fault
The yelling and the sighs
Each rough push you give me
The annoyance in your eyes

Just tell me straight the first time
Stop pushing me around
Don’t yell again, it hurts me
Though I try to block the sound

If you would only teach me
If you would show me how
Oh, just tell me what to do
It doesn’t matter now

Come glare and growl at me
I know that’s what you crave
Not good enough again
It’s hard to still look brave

But I won’t let you hurt me
Your words will not break through
I won’t let it touch me
The blame that will ensue

I’ll make my mind like stone
Won’t hear a word you say
I’ll make my heart like wood
I’ll make my feelings clay

I can block the angry words
At least a little while
I can shut out all the hurt
The pain of the revile

But the look that’s in your eyes
The frustration and disgust
I can’t block out the sight
Your eyes say I betrayed your trust





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RayBaytheDinosaur said...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 12:33 am
This has so much emotion in it and its just such a great overall poem =] your quite the amazing writer
 
TheWordSmith said...
Oct. 19, 2011 at 6:51 pm
Something I love about all your poems is the raw emotion you inject into each one. Keep up the good work!
 
musicispassion said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 11:34 pm
based on true events?  emotional poem and beautiful
 
Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Aug. 4, 2011 at 11:45 am

AMAZING!

I really connected with the poem and felt the emotion throughout. Keep it up!

 
Robyn97 said...
Jul. 22, 2011 at 12:21 pm
I think that some of the words (revile, ie) were used just for rhyming, but I think that the overall poem is really good. Four stars.
 
Medina D. said...
Jul. 8, 2011 at 6:36 pm

i like how you set up your poem :) Very nicely done. Though while reading it, i felt (just a bit) that some words were used for the sake of rhyming. The poem would be even cooler if you used some symbols of anger and hurt-----like a cold mysterious poem instead of a hard, direct one.

Overall, this deserves 4 stars.

 
AvengedJasonfoldForever said...
Jun. 29, 2011 at 7:52 pm

The thing about poetry is you either like it or you don't... I think your poems are good but they didn't do anything for me. I'm a hit-or-miss kind of guy with poetry and I never know what I'm going to like unless it's really twisted or something.

A personal preference of mine is complex poems. Something abstract... something symbolic. Something that makes no sense at all even. I don't know how to explain my taste in poetry. I write stuff like this all the time, but the stuff I REALLY ... (more »)

 
CarrieAnn13 said...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 8:53 am
Wow, this is an amazing poem!  I'm no expert on poetry, but I do know a good poem when I see one.  Your rhyming scheme was consistent and not gimicky like some rhyming poems are.  You had good imagery and I think the flow of the poem was flawless.  Good job!
 
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