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When I am embarrassed
The room feels stuffy
Wringing me out from the inside
Like a pot of scalding water
Being thrown over my body

When I am embarrassed
The words mix themselves up in my mouth
Coming out in an awkward jumble
Until I want to disappear like a turtle
And hide my head in shame

When I am embarrassed
My smooth shell will be a refuge
From the waves of mortifying emotions
And I will cocoon myself safely
In a quiet place where I am just

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ohmakemeover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 28, 2011 at 12:05 am
I often feel exactly the same way.  It is so refreshing to read a poem that is honest and a little claustrophobic, not littered with flowery prose and imagery.  You're very good at getting your true, blunt point across while still giving the reader a treat.
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 11:27 am
Thank you very much! I try to tell it like it is :)
ohheyyyelli said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 5:43 pm
I love the metaphor!
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 29, 2011 at 11:26 am
Thank you!
Bill M. said...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 2:44 pm
Well developed poem; great 3 stanzas.  Very pleasant read (not too intense) and relateable. Everyone has felt this way, so the metaphor definately made sense. Great work!
ritabelle511 replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 6:14 pm
Thanks for reading and commenting!
Reader101This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 6:40 pm
I agree!!! With the poem and with Mr. Bill... :) its simply perfect. I can relae to every word but I never wouldhave  thought to pull them together like that. You are a great writer! Keep it up! :)
JustAnotherOwl replied...
Jun. 28, 2011 at 7:23 pm
I completely agree with the above two...Guess there's not much else to say! Great poem, pleasant read!
ritabelle511 replied...
Jul. 1, 2011 at 3:47 pm
Haha, thanks very much guys!
Zinaidia replied...
Jul. 7, 2011 at 3:02 pm
Pretty good, you have a big imagination. The whole turtle shell concept is very relate-able. Only suggestion is to save mentioning the title of a poem until the end, it adds suspense. But this one is still very good, with the "myself" at the end. Good job :)
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