It works every time.

May 19, 2011
Every day I stand in the lunch line.
I buy a lunch.
I throw it away.
Works every time.
Every day my food finds its way into my napkin.
Then to the trashcan.
Works every time.
I tell my friends I already ate.
I'm not hungry thank you.
Works every time.
Every day Mom makes me a snack.
I make eating sounds.
I hide the carefully prepared snack in my closet till garbage day.
Works every time.
Every day I lose a pound.
Works every time.
Every day I lose some hair.
Every day I feel sick.
Every day I see ugly.
Then I die.
Anorexia never works.

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Raytheraym said...
Jun. 2, 2011 at 4:01 pm
Wow, amazing poem! It's so meaningful. Great job! :)
froggy said...
Jun. 2, 2011 at 10:24 am
This is an awesome poem! I think that once people read this, they will choose to make the right choice on what to do!! Keep up the good work
DanaiJanelle said...
Jun. 1, 2011 at 8:56 pm
I like it. It's really good. And It's genuine. 
kashiena said...
May 31, 2011 at 11:22 pm
I liked it, but certain parts didn't seem to flow as well as they felt like they should. Good, though!
swinginsunshine replied...
May 31, 2011 at 11:29 pm

@kashiena- which parts? I agree, but in order to revise, specific areas would be lovely!

@silver.lotus- yeah, i was debating about the last sentence, (which is where the preachiness comes off).. what would you suggest?

@pianophantom- THANK YOU!!!

silver.lotus said...
May 31, 2011 at 9:22 pm
This is really good! Kinda creepy :/ I loved it except for the end, it seemed slightly preachy in a way, but I love the statement.  Keep it up!(:
Piano_Phantom said...
May 31, 2011 at 9:07 pm
Already commented on this in the forums, but so good i gotta say it again.
LoveLikeCrazy replied...
Jun. 1, 2011 at 10:58 am
I think the message is really good, freaky, but good and very true! Keep writing:)
swinginsunshine replied...
Jun. 1, 2011 at 8:29 pm

Thank you ALL so much!!!

All critiques are appreciated!!

@silver.lotus- I agree, I was debating myself about the last phrase...what would you suggest changing?

@kashiena- I think so too :P which part would you change?

(saying specifics helos, so then I can revise :)

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