Crickets MAG

May 25, 2011
By AvengedJasonfoldForever BRONZE, Middletown, Delaware
AvengedJasonfoldForever BRONZE, Middletown, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
"You are about to die. Scream if you Must." -Fire Emblem character


Crickets drowning in the pool
So helplessly
The hell they see
A tidal wave
As I jump in
A life will end
Fun will begin

Sink to the bottom
The dusty depth
Where damned souls of bugs are kept
A gentle push; I break for air
Summer breezes caress my hair
Send crickets flying deeper yet
Trapped in water like fish in a net

As I enjoyed my swim I found
A lonely cricket about to drown
On his back he screams and begs
And kicks his little hairy legs
For once I decided not to ignore
Like the ones still rotting on the floor
The water around him suddenly drains
As he’s lifted up by giant hands
Happy he could breathe again
He bounced away to find his friends

The cricket that I had the urge to save
Came crawling back to challenge a wave
It pushed him back from the deadly lake
But the cricket trudged on
It was no mistake
Straight toward the side
And in with a plop
The cricket thrashed around on his back
And slowly died

At night they sing the cricket song
Mourning for the crickets gone
Lost in battle
Lost at sea
Lost in their stupidity


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on Jul. 2 2011 at 1:14 am
AvengedJasonfoldForever BRONZE, Middletown, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
"You are about to die. Scream if you Must." -Fire Emblem character

Good band? More like greatest band ever.

I won't try explaining. You're not a metalhead :P


on Jul. 2 2011 at 12:49 am
Writomania PLATINUM, New Delhi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"What really does not kill you, will only make you stronger"- Kanye West
"If there was no electricity, we would've had to watch the television by candle light"- Joe Jonas
Nobody will ever win the Battle of the Sexes. There's just too much fraternizing with the enemy. ~Henry Kissinger

Hm. Metal affects you; thats great. A nice way to let out your burning rage onto the calm, serene, and not to mention, gentle minds of your fellow TeenInkers.

Great Going.

P.s : Avenged Sevenfold is a good band. Dear God is my personal fav.


on Jul. 2 2011 at 12:16 am
AvengedJasonfoldForever BRONZE, Middletown, Delaware
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Favorite Quote:
"You are about to die. Scream if you Must." -Fire Emblem character

yeah i listen to too much metal to ever allow myself to be censored :P

on Jul. 1 2011 at 12:52 am
Writomania PLATINUM, New Delhi, Other
22 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What really does not kill you, will only make you stronger"- Kanye West
"If there was no electricity, we would've had to watch the television by candle light"- Joe Jonas
Nobody will ever win the Battle of the Sexes. There's just too much fraternizing with the enemy. ~Henry Kissinger

no arguing that...

on Jun. 30 2011 at 10:38 am
AvengedJasonfoldForever BRONZE, Middletown, Delaware
3 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You are about to die. Scream if you Must." -Fire Emblem character

...I am more able to express myself on facebook than here. I am here to help people get away from the confines of writing that they learn in school and on this website. I am here to see if I can help people find their true voice.

on Jun. 30 2011 at 1:55 am
Writomania PLATINUM, New Delhi, Other
22 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What really does not kill you, will only make you stronger"- Kanye West
"If there was no electricity, we would've had to watch the television by candle light"- Joe Jonas
Nobody will ever win the Battle of the Sexes. There's just too much fraternizing with the enemy. ~Henry Kissinger

hm.. that is, as a matter of fact, a problem. But then again, you are not on TeenInk to serve the purpose of some 'gentle-minded' teeninkers are you?

You're here to express yourself.. there should be no stopping that :|


on Jun. 29 2011 at 6:30 pm
AvengedJasonfoldForever BRONZE, Middletown, Delaware
3 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You are about to die. Scream if you Must." -Fire Emblem character

thanks I do keep writing problem is my other stuff contains profanity and inapporpriate topics for the gentle minds of teeninkers

on Jun. 29 2011 at 1:28 am
Writomania PLATINUM, New Delhi, Other
22 articles 0 photos 119 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What really does not kill you, will only make you stronger"- Kanye West
"If there was no electricity, we would've had to watch the television by candle light"- Joe Jonas
Nobody will ever win the Battle of the Sexes. There's just too much fraternizing with the enemy. ~Henry Kissinger

wow.. AMAZING.. you write so well.. i could almost hear a song blasting in my ears..

keep writing.


on Jun. 12 2011 at 7:45 pm
AvengedJasonfoldForever BRONZE, Middletown, Delaware
3 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You are about to die. Scream if you Must." -Fire Emblem character

oh stop flattering me healing angel :P

Throw some interesting stories my way--I prefer if people email them to me so that i can discuss things faster and in my own language with unlimitated space, but if you're all paranoid about internet safety or whatever I understand lol


on Jun. 12 2011 at 1:03 am
Healing_Angel SILVER, Sydney, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Live for today, not for tomorrow

I really like this... Poetry doesn't come easily to me.

on Jun. 12 2011 at 1:01 am
Healing_Angel SILVER, Sydney, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Live for today, not for tomorrow

Hey Jason!

You came back- I knew you would! I couldn't see how you could possibly stay away when a) there are people who need help to improve their writing(me included!) and b) you could prove them wrong! I've missed you(and yes, your critiques!) I haven't had much time for creativity, I've mainlybeen writing essays and speeches! BORING! 


on Jun. 11 2011 at 10:54 pm
AvengedJasonfoldForever BRONZE, Middletown, Delaware
3 articles 0 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You are about to die. Scream if you Must." -Fire Emblem character

why thank you I'm glad you find drowning insects funny and now that I know where your sense of humor lies I should introduce you to something that's REALLY funny :P

 


on Jun. 11 2011 at 4:31 pm
gogreen1 SILVER, Gretna, Nebraska
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Funny funny!! This made me laugh out loud, which is quite rare in writing. 

I admire that you were able to make it rhyme and still feel natural. Whenever I try to write rhyming poetry I find myself adding a lot of "just"'s and 'really's to add syllables and get it to work. This felt really natural and not all stiff. 

:)



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