Spring Rose.

April 16, 2011
By rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.


Her petals, so delicate
But a fierce, fiery red.
She holds her head high
With her shoulders of thorns thrown back.
All of the daisies
Buttercups
And dandelions
Bow down their heads in shame.
But when the frigid winds
Send their icy rage across the gardens
The beautiful rose
Is elegant no more.
Her petals are a faded memory of the past.
Now
The dandelions mock her
The ugly weeds snicker in her face
And the wise old mums
Shake their heads in pity.
She is a frail
Old
Remembrance.
Forever embedded into the soil
Never to see the light of spring
Ever
Again.


The author's comments:
I actually jotted this poem down in 5th grade during a boring math class. I found it again when I was cleaning out my closet. 8) Hope you like it! And please please please leave a comment!

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on Sep. 5 2012 at 11:35 am
MarieAntoinette2014 DIAMOND, Scottsburg, Indiana
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Isn't it ironic? We ignore the ones who adore us, adore the ones who ignore us, love the ones who hurt us, and hurt the ones that love us.

Lol. Can relate to burned poems, and stories. Think we all did that.

on Sep. 5 2012 at 11:34 am
MarieAntoinette2014 DIAMOND, Scottsburg, Indiana
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Isn't it ironic? We ignore the ones who adore us, adore the ones who ignore us, love the ones who hurt us, and hurt the ones that love us.

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on Nov. 9 2011 at 4:29 pm
Lexie96 GOLD, Havana, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Now Cinderella don't you go to sleep, it's such a bitter form of refuge, oh don't you know the kingdom's under siege, and everbody needs you. - The Killers

Wow, I am astounded that you wrote this in fifth grade... you must have been like me running around with your hands stained black! LOL, really good work and very detailed...

check out my stuff if you have a chance?


on Oct. 18 2011 at 9:48 pm
Miki-chan BRONZE, Waynesboro, Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
Don't screw with Crazy.

I love this poem! I wrote a poem in a study period in 5th grade, too. But my teacher ran across it and asumed I was suicidal, because it was rather depressing. That poem was a first class ticket to the guidence coucilor, even though nothing was emotionally wrong with me! I'm glad I'm homeschooled now.

on Jul. 26 2011 at 7:49 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Lol, I definitely will

 


on Jul. 23 2011 at 8:56 pm
Free_One PLATINUM, ????, Ohio
40 articles 1 photo 773 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am not invincible or unstoppable, but I stay strong because it is the only way to survive in this world."

WOW!!! awesome peom! great job! could u check out my work? I need comments. please post a comment! :) just click my user name and pick a story! thanks and keep writing! :)(:

on Jun. 26 2011 at 9:22 am
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Hahahahaha thanks!

on Jun. 26 2011 at 9:22 am
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Thank you!

on Jun. 25 2011 at 12:15 pm
RhythmAndRhyme BRONZE, Rockford, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"There's no half-singing in the shower, you're either a rock star or an opera diva." ~~Josh Groban

Amazing! 5th grade? Really? That's amazing for 5th grade. Kudos to you! :DDD

on Jun. 25 2011 at 12:50 am
Warm_My_Heart GOLD, My City, Other
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Favorite Quote:
“Too often we underestimate the power of a touch, a smile, a kind word, a listening ear, an honest compliment, or the smallest act of caring, all of which have the potential to turn a life around.”
Leo F. Buscaglia

This is so dramatic and powerful, yet beautiful and soft. Nicely done.

on Jun. 22 2011 at 7:17 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Lol, and I'll be sure to check out your work!!! :)

on Jun. 22 2011 at 7:16 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

LOL, and thanks!!! :)

on Jun. 22 2011 at 8:09 am
Kwigggggg BRONZE, Newmarket, Other
3 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everything will be okay in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end.

This is really good! It speaks so much truth about today's society, you were able to capture a really powerful message and tone to the poem, in so few words! 

Please check out my story A House is not a Home! :)


on Jun. 22 2011 at 1:24 am
bells1995 BRONZE, Wheaton, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love something, then let it go. If it comes back to you then it's yours forever. If it doesn't then it was never ment to be."

This is so cute. I really enjoyed reading it. And for writing this in 5th grade is so incrediable. I am 15 going to be 16 in a couple months and this is a million times better then any peotry I have EVER written. Keep up the great work :)

on Jun. 18 2011 at 12:30 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

I don't know if I'll ever post it, but if I do, I most certainly will notify you :) Thanks.

on Jun. 18 2011 at 10:51 am
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Thank you, and tell me when your chocolate piece goes online! I definitely want to read it!

on Jun. 18 2011 at 10:51 am
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

Lol thanks, looking back, even I can't believe I wrote it at 5th grade! But thankss!!

on Jun. 18 2011 at 7:26 am
inkblot13 PLATINUM, Auburn, New York
41 articles 1 photo 162 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I knew where poems came from, I'd go there"




- Michael Langley, 'Staying Alive'

This is really good, you werer able to personify the flowers reallywell. Good job, and goodness, that's awesome for 5th grade! word choice is just excellent

on Jun. 17 2011 at 4:35 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2216 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

This is really good, I loved the imagery :)

I've tried to do something like this with chocolate, I wanted to try and personify what certain kinds reminded me of people-wise. I'm doing a terrible job of it, though.

I'm really impressed that you wrote this in fifth grade.


on Jun. 12 2011 at 8:01 pm
rubyrainstorm SILVER, Closter, New Jersey
7 articles 0 photos 275 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
-Buddha.

I just wanted to say if anyone has anything they want me to check out, please let me know. :) I really appreciate all of your feedback, and would like to give you some if you want it.




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