Spring Rose.

April 16, 2011
Her petals, so delicate
But a fierce, fiery red.
She holds her head high
With her shoulders of thorns thrown back.
All of the daisies
And dandelions
Bow down their heads in shame.
But when the frigid winds
Send their icy rage across the gardens
The beautiful rose
Is elegant no more.
Her petals are a faded memory of the past.
The dandelions mock her
The ugly weeds snicker in her face
And the wise old mums
Shake their heads in pity.
She is a frail
Forever embedded into the soil
Never to see the light of spring

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MarieAntoinette2012 said...
Sept. 5, 2012 at 11:35 am
Lol. Can relate to burned poems, and stories. Think we all did that.
Lexie96 said...
Nov. 9, 2011 at 4:29 pm

Wow, I am astounded that you wrote this in fifth grade... you must have been like me running around with your hands stained black! LOL, really good work and very detailed...

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CaeCae97 said...
Oct. 18, 2011 at 9:48 pm
I love this poem! I wrote a poem in a study period in 5th grade, too. But my teacher ran across it and asumed I was suicidal, because it was rather depressing. That poem was a first class ticket to the guidence coucilor, even though nothing was emotionally wrong with me! I'm glad I'm homeschooled now.
writerfreak21231This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jul. 23, 2011 at 8:56 pm
WOW!!! awesome peom! great job! could u check out my work? I need comments. please post a comment! :) just click my user name and pick a story! thanks and keep writing! :)(:
ExpRESsY0uRse1F replied...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 7:49 pm

Lol, I definitely will


RhythmAndRhyme said...
Jun. 25, 2011 at 12:15 pm
Amazing! 5th grade? Really? That's amazing for 5th grade. Kudos to you! :DDD
ExpRESsY0uRse1F replied...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 9:22 am
Hahahahaha thanks!
Warm_My_Heart said...
Jun. 25, 2011 at 12:50 am
This is so dramatic and powerful, yet beautiful and soft. Nicely done.
ExpRESsY0uRse1F replied...
Jun. 26, 2011 at 9:22 am
Thank you!
Kwigggggg said...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 8:09 am

This is really good! It speaks so much truth about today's society, you were able to capture a really powerful message and tone to the poem, in so few words! 

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ExpRESsY0uRse1F replied...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 7:17 pm
Lol, and I'll be sure to check out your work!!! :)
bells1995 said...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 1:24 am
This is so cute. I really enjoyed reading it. And for writing this in 5th grade is so incrediable. I am 15 going to be 16 in a couple months and this is a million times better then any peotry I have EVER written. Keep up the great work :)
ExpRESsY0uRse1F replied...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 7:16 pm
LOL, and thanks!!! :)
inkblot13 said...
Jun. 18, 2011 at 7:26 am
This is really good, you werer able to personify the flowers reallywell. Good job, and goodness, that's awesome for 5th grade! word choice is just excellent
ExpRESsY0uRselF replied...
Jun. 18, 2011 at 10:51 am
Lol thanks, looking back, even I can't believe I wrote it at 5th grade! But thankss!!
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Jun. 17, 2011 at 4:35 pm

This is really good, I loved the imagery :)

I've tried to do something like this with chocolate, I wanted to try and personify what certain kinds reminded me of people-wise. I'm doing a terrible job of it, though.

I'm really impressed that you wrote this in fifth grade.

ExpRESsY0uRselF replied...
Jun. 18, 2011 at 10:51 am
Thank you, and tell me when your chocolate piece goes online! I definitely want to read it!
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Jun. 18, 2011 at 12:30 pm
I don't know if I'll ever post it, but if I do, I most certainly will notify you :) Thanks.
ExpRESsY0uRselF said...
Jun. 12, 2011 at 8:01 pm
I just wanted to say if anyone has anything they want me to check out, please let me know. :) I really appreciate all of your feedback, and would like to give you some if you want it.
MarieAntoinette2012 replied...
Sept. 5, 2012 at 11:34 am
Can you check out some of my stuff? Pleeeeeeeeaassssse? 
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