March 9, 2011
That pale little hand being led to the bedroom
Those corduroy jeans being tossed to the floor
That innocent smile as he leans in to kiss her
The green of her eyes as they lay down for more
The very same eyes I caught reading Harry Potter past their bedtime.

Those bouncy red curls flattened against the bedspread
Twisted and tangled and coated in gel
Those delicate hands exploring his body
Those tiny girl’s hands, that I knew so well
The very same that shook me awake year after year on Christmas morning.

What happened to the little princess?
The cross country runner?
The sweet baby girl?

The science fair champion:
Arching her back and closing her eyes
gasping and panting and
pulling him closer
To the body I held in the hospital.

The clumsy ballerina:
Being rocked back and forth
Going limp with pleasure
Sighing satisfied
With the voice that asked me for a later bed time.

My rosy cheeked child who loved musical theatre
and wore purple sweaters
is gone.

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MeganRozalia said...
Dec. 22, 2011 at 12:04 pm
i iwsh this wasnt anonymous so i could read more of your work.
Danni_MSY replied...
Jan. 13, 2012 at 5:50 pm
That's exactly how I feel..
ninja17 said...
Dec. 5, 2011 at 10:08 pm
This was astounishing! I love it :) Haha especially the title ;D hahaha good job :)
raindance72 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 6:36 pm

I really felt more like a mother than a teeanage girl after reading this. That's really strong, if you can transport a reader into someone else's mind through poetry. I love it.

Hope some of you can check out my work! I'm dying for some comments on my poems, especially "Helium Balloons" :)

MeaghanSeesStarsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 5:39 pm

what do you mean by coated in gel? :/

greast poem btw. it's really original.

anonymous replied...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 5:52 pm
Thanks! I meant that the subject has really curly red hair which she almost always gells. This is a portrait of a girl (albeit a very subjective one) and I was trying to really get her image in the readers head. 
publicdomain replied...
Dec. 22, 2011 at 8:07 am
Well good job you did great with descriptions of her. Very well written
Volleyballgirl1812 said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 1:53 pm

wow. You put yourself in the mothes mind and you captured the betrayal (I think) and disapointment the mother felt. YOu did a fantastic job on this and it deserves to be awarded something.


Jennypig said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 6:38 am
Wow, you can really feel the hurt that this mother would have/did. I really like how you put this. If you have time can you check out my work? I'd really enjoy your thoughts on some of my pieces
youngspeare said...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 5:42 am
this piece is awesome! Keep it up.
Check out my work, please :)
BeyondTheBrooke said...
Nov. 27, 2011 at 3:04 pm
i think the authors note is almost as powerful as the poem.... wow :)
BrokenBree said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 8:09 pm
This is just... It has left me speechless! There aren't enough words to describe what an amazing job you have done with this poem!
ilovewriting43 said...
Nov. 16, 2011 at 10:54 am
I kept on trying but it wouldn't let me click ten stars :)
LivingMYLife replied...
Nov. 23, 2011 at 12:24 am
lol i know right?! AMAZING!!!
writer101 said...
Nov. 8, 2011 at 4:36 pm
Amazing use of words and descripstion. I can feel the love the mother had for her daughter and her sadness of her growing older
Aubrie said...
Nov. 8, 2011 at 4:14 pm
Wow I love this, it shows how the mother feels of her daughters lost childlike innocence. This is fantastic!
jshawts said...
Nov. 8, 2011 at 3:28 pm
This is AMAZING! I love all of the small details you included. This is intriguing and dangerous at the same time. Great job! :)
chris0911 said...
Nov. 8, 2011 at 8:22 am
i really like this! but u wanna know a really good poem? check out old dusty flag! its an amazing poem
DakotaShadow replied...
Nov. 8, 2011 at 2:45 pm
Did you really think no one would notice that that's YOUR work. Dont lie to us, child.
chrissie_star replied...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 10:30 am
-like- LMAO!!!!!
LivingMYLife said...
Nov. 4, 2011 at 8:52 pm simply amazing! it does make me wonder how old you are though. my gosh that was amazing.
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