March 9, 2011
That pale little hand being led to the bedroom
Those corduroy jeans being tossed to the floor
That innocent smile as he leans in to kiss her
The green of her eyes as they lay down for more
The very same eyes I caught reading Harry Potter past their bedtime.

Those bouncy red curls flattened against the bedspread
Twisted and tangled and coated in gel
Those delicate hands exploring his body
Those tiny girl’s hands, that I knew so well
The very same that shook me awake year after year on Christmas morning.

What happened to the little princess?
The cross country runner?
The sweet baby girl?

The science fair champion:
Arching her back and closing her eyes
gasping and panting and
pulling him closer
To the body I held in the hospital.

The clumsy ballerina:
Being rocked back and forth
Going limp with pleasure
Sighing satisfied
With the voice that asked me for a later bed time.

My rosy cheeked child who loved musical theatre
and wore purple sweaters
is gone.

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Aduke9 said...
May 24, 2012 at 8:47 am
That was a sad and beautiful poem.
turdis said...
May 3, 2012 at 8:03 am
I really liked your poem and the way it was written in stanzas and I liked how to lines flowed together.
J1029 said...
May 2, 2012 at 8:22 pm
That's actually kinda sad. But ur a great writer.
Fallen_Angel said...
May 2, 2012 at 5:21 pm
This is absolutly amazing! I'm blown away!
...Travis... This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 19, 2012 at 10:59 pm
Interesting poem. A little constuctive criticism? The last line in each stanza doesn't really flow... But then again maybe that's how you wanted it(?).
reman5 said...
Mar. 19, 2012 at 2:42 pm
WOW, I was blown away with al the emotions. It is absolutely great, you expressed that mother's feelings better than I would have ever imagined. Great job!
hippiechick99 replied...
Apr. 10, 2012 at 7:44 am
I LOVED this poem. I wouldn't change a thing I hope you keep writing.
lbbarlow125 said...
Mar. 8, 2012 at 7:17 pm
(Y) Good work really . . . . . . . interesting
Let-Love-In said...
Feb. 28, 2012 at 8:29 pm
wow you are an amazing writer, so much emotion and feeling was put into this. i would love for you to look at my work and give me some pointers!
loveissmiles replied...
Mar. 8, 2012 at 7:38 am

i agree. Amazing piece. I would also like some feedback. You are incredible, and i would love some help.


Chelsy22 said...
Feb. 26, 2012 at 8:00 pm
Great Poem!
StarryRoss said...
Feb. 26, 2012 at 6:14 pm
i agree with everyone, such good flashbacks that connect to the impossible thing her mother can't believe she did. Good point of view and you definitely evoked the feeling of someone stunned into silence
Lacie101 said...
Feb. 26, 2012 at 3:14 pm
so nice i loved it
mayemmalik said...
Feb. 26, 2012 at 5:43 am
This was touching. I showed it to my mum :)
bahannahpeel This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 19, 2012 at 8:38 pm
Reading this aloud gave me chills. Great writing.
maggiehoran96 said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 9:43 am
Awesome description. I loved reading this!
Wallflower95 said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 10:08 pm
I just cried because I could relate so deeply. All I can say is, poetry at its finest.
SaraA said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 10:05 pm
Wow, this was absolutely fantastic!!
LedZepGurl said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 7:41 pm
You are a true writer. This poem took my breath away leaving me in a trance. All i can say in my mind is wow! This is a very touching poem.
Michaela M. replied...
Feb. 15, 2012 at 4:55 pm
i completly agree with ledzepgulrl you are an amazing writer it was sonderful i really felt the emotions of everyone in it
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