This Poem Will Satirize Poems MAG

January 9, 2011
By aschneider SILVER, Ny, New York
aschneider SILVER, Ny, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"How often does one swell to one's own insignificance?" - Thai adage


An Apple (notice the capitalization
It's important
(That line break
was too)
And the reference to Adam and Eve)
Sidles and slouches in a wrinkled cluttered place
(the line is
Cluttered
and there is an alliteration
also I am vague)
Mold creeps,
With personification,
On our old apple
(I'm addressing you)
A worm won't ever choose
To reside within
Such a place.
(Nobody wants the apple
because mankind has ruined
Our knowledge (that's commentary
On society
with a rhyme.)


The author's comments:
I wrote this poem after reading another poem in English class that had an apple in it and was talking about the way humans have destroyed the earth. The apple is hackneyed by now and people really just have to move on - try an orange for a change.

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on Feb. 15 2012 at 11:07 pm
blake_wedekind BRONZE, Issaquah, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
"A great man shows his greatness by the way he treats little men" - Thomas Carlyle

Haha good stuff. Funny.

on Jan. 24 2012 at 5:08 pm
Imaginedangerous PLATINUM, Riverton, Utah
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I don't think poems deserve to be satirized as much as literary criticism. (Unless the poem was written with the intention of being a literary masterpeice, which sounds like the case here and is kind of sad.) I like writing that doesn't take things too seriously- good job.

on Jan. 24 2012 at 2:06 pm
lifesaway BRONZE, Orange, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Don't become a teacher.

Sweet story bro! It makes alot of sense! I find it as so interesting as to how vague and confusing it is. But that is the start of a great poem. Read my most recent poem. Its brutal truth.




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