November 1, 2010
By Avid_Artist_18 BRONZE, Syracuse, Utah
Avid_Artist_18 BRONZE, Syracuse, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Warn your warmth to turn away, here it's december, everyday." -Afi
"The most powerful weapon on earth, is the human soul on fire"

These emotions,
spinning inside me
threaten to explode
and erode the world
with hurt, pain and sorrow
my mind is filled with thoughts
trying to make sense of your message
it wouldn't be so hard if you
tried to talk this over
it wouldn't be easy either
if you went away
so. maybe i'm dreaming
that the pillow beside me
is empty
and your downstairs making coffee
your not gone
your still here
clouding my mind,
and my fragile heart.

The author's comments:
I wrote this after my boyfriend broke up with me, so its really personal.

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on Feb. 2 2012 at 6:51 pm
MaryEllenCags SILVER, Fanwood, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"I'm not an arsonist. But I am a pyromaniac." -Kieth Richards, Life

I really enjoyed this. I usually don't like breakup poems but this one was very well executed and has a mature prose style. The only thing is that you used "your" instead of "you're." Not to be a pain in the neck or anything, it is the only flaw in an otherwise lovely poem.

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