November 6, 2010
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Perhaps it will rain so hard it will wash away my makeup and lies, uncovering the truth.
If I run fast enough, will the winds take me up above the ground?
Perhaps I will be able to fly level with the clouds, so that the raindrops are merely my tears.
Maybe the winds will then drop me harshly to the ground, and as I plummet, I think it might be the end.
And then maybe you'll be there to catch me.

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gracegirl29 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 16, 2011 at 2:00 pm
i think it does make a good poem! i love poems that are kind of uncertain. It wasn't lacking emotion or anything! I just might suggest taking out the "and" and the beginning of the second to last line. but . . . great job!!
WintersRevenge replied...
Feb. 15, 2011 at 4:44 pm
Thanks! I'll take that into consideration! I love to hear people's honest opinions about my work :)
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