October 16, 2010
The candlelight is dimming

with each passing minute.

Who knows how long until

the wick is gone?

It would only take

a miracle

for the candle

to keep burning,

for the light it gives off

to be seen and

to be fed.

But, unfortunately,

night draws its

breath away


the candle is dimming

with each passing minute,

but I don’t want the

wick to be gone.

Blow gently now,

softly—like a kiss.

Feed the fire and flame.

The flame casts itself

away from me.

The flame flickers,

but I cannot gasp—

for I would take away

any air left.

Sitting, waiting

hoping the light remains.

Watching, crying,

praying the light remains.

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Keli123 said...
Aug. 26, 2011 at 10:21 pm
Ahh I really like this one! Especially how it doesn't say exactly what it means, but I could still figure it out. Really well written. You've got a lot of good stuff one here :)
singingdetective replied...
Sept. 8, 2011 at 2:48 pm
Ah! Thank you very much! No one really scrolls through my poetry :(((((((( but i'm glad you did!!! thank you! :D
singingdetective replied...
Sept. 8, 2011 at 2:50 pm

Have you read "The Treasure I Found", "All I Find", or "Peaceful Storm"? In my opinion, those are my best works so far :P

since I don't get many comments/ratings, feel free to rate and/or comment on at least those three!! I'd really appreciate it! :DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

Keli123 replied...
Sept. 8, 2011 at 3:35 pm
Your welcome. I'll take a look at your other stuff too! :)
S M Wells said...
Nov. 2, 2010 at 4:30 pm
I do not think, that without your explanation I would have understude the implide. Still, it could represent most anything and still carry the same efect. I like it.
singingdetective replied...
Nov. 3, 2010 at 12:18 pm
mhmm. the light represents the goodness within someone
singingdetective replied...
Nov. 3, 2010 at 12:20 pm
and i'm glad you like it! :D
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